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Ketura's Haiku

when I say
hello to you
I say ' hi K.'
but always hear
'haiku'!

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  • shyam balaji
    March 25, 2006
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    short but neat

    hai poet.This is a verry good piece, keep up the good work. It was a not very hard to read,  it was still awsome! good luck.my best wishes for you become a good poet in future.pls comment on my poems.bye!!
    take care.

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  • March 25, 2006
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    Different

    This was an awesome peice of work! I like how it rhymes alittle bit! Over all, an enjoyable peice of poetry; one that I hope you are proud of!

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  • ketura498
    March 27, 2006
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    SWEET...

    CANT  BELIEVE YOU  ACTUALLY TOOK THE TIME TO WRITE ONE ONE ME...

    IF I HAVE TO WRITE A PIECE  THAT EPITOMISES YOU I MAY NOT EVER HAVE ENOUGH SPACE...HEHE

    BUT THANK YOU AGAIN..
    ITS AMAZING, THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT YOU SAY TO ME ALL THE TIME

    OBJECTIVELY,

    IT FLOWS WONDERFULLY, AND I'M NOT SAYING THAT JUS BECAUSE...THE SIMPLE WORDS GETS YOU THOUGHTS ACROSS WITHOUT BEING UNCLEAR. ITS DIRECT. IT ROLLS OFF THE TONGUE EASE...AND IT RHYMES!!!!

    ITS JUS SWEET ALL ROUND...

    ALWAYS WONEDERED HOW "HI K" COULD SOUND LIKE HAIKU...
    DO U HAVE A HEAVY ACCENT?...LOL




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  • ketura498
    March 27, 2006
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    OHH BY THE WAY...

    I

    LOVE

    IT!!


  • Here And There
    March 27, 2006
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    Cute! direct n cute, keep up the good work, sounds very good. Nice rhyme in there.


    • Windhover silver member
      March 28, 2006
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      Thanks!

      A reply
      longer than
      the poem itself
      would kind of
      defeat
      the purpose


  • March 28, 2006
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    Is the convention 5-7-5 in English, not that it matters? So you could have written

    when I say hello
    to you I say 'hi K.' but
    always hear 'haiku'

    which gives it a slightly different flavour.
    I enjoy your play on words.
    Thanks,
    H

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    • Windhover silver member
      March 28, 2006
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      Thanks for the comment.!

      Hi Hodgie ! I must confess I don`t know that much about haiku and don't really have an interest in them. This one suggested itself exactly as it describes - which appealed to me.


  • March 31, 2006
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    OK

    GREat Rhymes


  • April 1, 2006
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    It's nice

    Really nice, different and individual. Try doing this:

    when I say
    hello to you
    I say ' hi K.'
    but always
    hear 'haiku'


    Just an idea. Hear from you soon,

    -Sasha xxx

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  • April 6, 2006
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    this is cute

    i don't know how to get points for this, because their isn't much to write.. .but this made me smile, and gave me a lift - this is wonderful right.

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  • Existence
    April 19, 2006
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    That was an interesting haiku. Very cute.


  • May 7, 2006
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    not a haiku, but clever

    i can picture that hi k, but your hear haiku - it;s neat, and natural and all you. perfect for a girl who fits the bill. i have read lots of your work, and it's great.

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  • badmashabhi
    July 22, 2006
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    Short yet Powerful !!!

    Ur just so good in effectively showing the true beauty of a haiku . This one just tells u why . Relaly  well done and keep writing .
    ~~~Abhi~~~

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    • Windhover silver member
      July 25, 2006
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      This was fun and an experiment for me Abhi. I don't usually do rigid forms and I'm told by those who know that this is not a 'real' haiku. But it's a 'true' story dedicated to 'Ketura 498'and all my correspondence to her now begins 'Hi Ku' . I love that sort of nonsense! Glad you liked the poem.