this haiku affirms
that wisdom can’t be imparted.
Why did I start it?
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Love this. Love the thoughts and feelings behind the words. I'm wondering though if you need the first line. What if you started directly with wisdom. My two cents anyway. Nice reading you. Maria
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why did i read it..lol
simple yet your message is powerful.
ok umm..not too clear about haiku.. so technical criticism i can't do, well, jus yet anyway.
so i'm not gonna rate you.
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How coud you not?! lol
You? Not clear on haiku?
What am I going to do
about teaching you?
According to those more learned than me they go-
5 syllables da da da da da
7 syllables ma ma ma ma ma ma ma
5 syllables da da da da da
Or at least have 17 syllables only in total
Easy-peasy Japaneasy !
glad you liked it!
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lol.. ur so sweet sometimes..
i'm clear now...
u know wat i was doing to count the syllables.... when i was smaller the teach would make us put our hands under our chins so u would be able to tell how ofetn the word breaks. i was jus using that lolol..
thanks for the hand..
and i know i owe u a poem.. its best i take my time and write one that force my hand.. i might jus pen a lot of nonsense.
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Can it not?
thats sad. does that also mean...one is just born with it? hmmm, a good thought. maybe its true.
Im also not into haiku though im really interested in it. I find it a challenge that everytime i start something, i end with a longer piece of poetry.
I enjoyed reading this. Still trying to make something more out of what i understood of it.
Best regards.
Lynne
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Glad it made you think ... !
Actually 'imparted' is not the right word - but it fits so nicely into the poem ! My reflection would be more accurately stated as " you can't tell anybody anything who's not ready to HEAR " ( would you believe - 17 syllables ?). Only by experiencing life can we be made ready to recognize wisdom when we come across it - or when it is being imparted ! But I like the poem and I'm glad you do too . Thanks for the comment and hopefully we are both 'wiser' for the exchange!
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It's been a pleasure.
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April 5, 2006
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