MORNING PAGES
I do Morning Pages .
My sister and Julia put me up to it.
Every morning
as soon as I’m awake
3 pages – no more , no less -
about nothing at all.
Just what’s on my mind.
At 4 in the morning
that’s nothing at all.
At least so you’d guess.
But blink –
and the pages start filling
with stuff I’d no idea
I was dealing with.
Fascinating –
to watch the pen move
as if by itself-
get into a groove
and go ‘off on one’-
watch it scrawl
as my subconscious
deals with it all.
All the junk
that I didn’t know
I’d stored away
comes tumbling
out of the cuphoards.
And I thought the left side of my brain was a mess!
Nevertheless -
they make me feel better
Just writing a letter
to yourself it seems
can tap into your dreams .
It’s like a shrink
you don’t have to pay for .
The ‘Pages’ keep telling me
‘ say more’
and I think
‘What the heck-
at least they won’t have their hand out
- for a cheque !’
They let me listen
to the guy who lives in the next apartment
of my head.
He doesn’t care what I think.
But he listens to everything I say.
Apparently he’ll obey me
If I keep it simple.
And say it out loud .
He’s gullible too .
No need to disguise
my small white lies
or even big black ones .
If I say it -
its true –
in his book.
So I tell him stuff like
‘I’m great’
And apparently he goes off
And gets things done on that basis.
It amazes me
Really .
He’s such a dope !
I hope he stays that way.
So we can keep writing.
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Way to go!
What a delightful piece! I came here to take a break before the day breaks me, another fifteen-hour day,
and found ... This!
Much better than any more coding of files into chronological order, designing the pages as I go, into an archive. Making the links all work.
Meanwhile here you are, links linked, discovering how great discovery can be!
In AP, I'd send applauses because you have found where your muse LIVES!
Bravo, bravissimo!
And megathanks!
Terry. Rewarded 4
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I like, this poem for a couple of reason, one it keeps me interested, which is hard for me with long poems. On top of that any writer can relate to it. They way your rambling thoughts can all come together. Cleaning out the skeletons from your thoughts. Thats aobut it.. Rewarded 4
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Ah, now this I also like. Flows great, and it describes this idea so nicely. The short lines and (by comparison) long stnzas, wioth an almost constant enjambament gives this great feel for the thoughts just tumbling out one after another without much rhyme or reason. WHile at the same time, what you're saying is very clear and unencumbered.
I think I might question mark the last two stanzas though, they seem... somewhat seperate and odd next to the rest fo the work. I suppose if that's what you wanted it;s fine, but to me the just don't seem to fit, and you intention with them isn't really clear. The 4th stanza sounds like an end, as does the 6th, in a way the poem almost concludes twice.. Rewarded 4
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Good catch !
Thank you 'lorek' for one of the sharpest reviews I've had since I joined the site.I tend to tell short stories in my poems and the stories themselves usually get more attention than the 'work'. All response is of course welcome and gratifying ( well, almost all ) but informed critique such as this is what really helps progress .
I titled this reply as I did because there is indeed a shift of focus where you called it , at the end of the 4th stanza. What fascinates me about the morning pages is how they put you in touch with the subconcious and help control it to some degree. But some of the thoughts in the last 2 stanzas originate in material found outside the book on Morning Pages itself.
It does all tie in for me however and ,though I looked at it carefully, it looks like this is the only one of 3 poems you critqued for me that I won't be changeing. Ironic - as this was perhaps the best of your many 'good catches' on my work.
Really enjoyed and appreciated the feedback. I will definitely look you up and try to return the favour asap.
Thanks again. W.
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Hehe, fair enoughsky. Well I try to do a good critique, I don't see the point in posting to say "Oh my good, I lvoe this so much!"
Pleasant, but, ya know, unhelpful. Hehe.
That's fair enough. Then perhaps might I suggest you clarify/expland the last two stanzas? Cause I'm interested in what you're saying there, but I'm sure I'm only half understanding it.
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Great Work!
May 20, 2006
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