I like women’s poetry.
it’s different to men’s.
if a woman has something to say
she’ll get it said
like it comes
straight
off her head
and onto the page.
she’ll communicate
the words of her heart
as easily
as she might
discuss a trip to the mall
- or a bereavement-
with the girl next door.
men are more
- defensive
find it difficult
to express
have an almost
universal need
to impress
with what we say
hiding away
what’s on our mind
with less-than-subtle
rhymes
and vocabulary
and
form.
it’s not normal
for us to bare
our souls
which is probably
why we like women,
their poetry
and their role
as seekers
of what poems
we men
may have inside us.
It's poetic somehow.
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yessssss! lol!
and we are endlessly seeking, indeed! whew! lol
a great write windhover! i would take this as a compliment! truly glad you appreciate this distinct "role". a lot would say....she's simply being a woman! ur saying its poetic...i'l go with your judgement (of course! lol!)
Luckily, i think my husband will agree.
cheers!
Lynne. Rewarded 1
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yessssss! lol!
and we are endlessly seeking, indeed! whew! lol
a great write windhover! i would take this as a compliment! truly glad you appreciate this distinct "role". a lot would say....she's simply being a woman! ur saying its poetic...i'l go with your judgement (of course! lol!)
Luckily, i think my husband will agree.
cheers!
Lynne. Rewarded 1
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It's rude to gloat in the face of magnanimity!
..and if you can pronounce that you may have at least one more drink ! lol . I only gave you 3tars Lynne coz you didn`t give me nearly a hard enough time ( unlike Ketura who picked me up not only on my message but on my punctuation as well!) I love that you liked it but I'd like to hear what worked for you - as well as what didn't. Your generosity is swelling my head so much I can't get a hat to fit me ! (-: Thanks again. -
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haha
3 stars is fine with me! and since u asked for it, a hard time, you're getting on ur next post. lol.
well, i thought this poem was just too special to my ears to be picked on. lol. its not everyday you got such a compliment for being a "woman" (in general)! i just wanna indulge...hehe
allow me that, at least, windhover. lol
c ya!
L
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i love the first stanza..
the comparison is " tight"
the last stanza can you please punctuate "why we like women,
their poetry
thats about it
since you are comparing us to u all don't you think i'm jus wondering here, that your last stanza shoud be like " its their poetic Know-how"
only a suggestion.
other that that it can hold its own. interesting and unexpected.
i like.
i think my review are sometimes biased objectivity when it comes to you is kinda difficult.
i'' try though.
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On the other hand...
... Women are never satisfied! Here I am giving you some good press and not only are you GLOATING (well , 'scribbled' more than you) but you're demanding MORE kudos.' " its their poetic Know-how" 'indeed ! What I think is poetic is a little more complex than how brilliant the fairer sex are ! (LOL) (-: .I gave you 4stars for this but only because it's you and you expressed bias in my favour ! It's sobering ( but proper ) that you should now be correcting MY grammar and punctuation (-: But I'll get you back ! As soon as you post a poem !
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Wonderful
There is also something to be side in the hidden messgae of a mens poetry. The first stanza should it be than men's not to men's. I like the choice of form, how it kinda wanders, when you talk about men's form being different and you make it stick out. I really like that. All in all I like this poem a lot, maybe it's cause I'm a girl.. Rewarded 1
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Thanks Jester
Glad you mentioned the little stunt with 'form' ( i was quite smug about that ! ) Had to laugh reading how you put it - read it back to yourself and you'll see what I mean ! I didn't intend THAT . Anyway , glad you liked it ! -
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wow
I didn't notice that, glad you understood what I meant though.
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Heeeeeeeey, I contest! I express just great! lol
As this is a "making a point" type poem, it's not one you really talk about language imagery and metaphor for. However I must say what I really loved was this description of how flowing and easy female poetry is, which juddered along because of the constant enjambament. It's just cleverly amusing, I liked.
Line 29+30 also good.
However I, must disagree
With your gender account
Of poetry
For all my faves were writ by men
By Shakespeare, Milton, Eliot, Ben
(Johnson)
And to contrast, well let me see
I have a book from my GCSE (exams)
An anthology
Of poetry
Wo here do we see? Carol Anne Duffy
A female poet if ever there be.
And what does she right about?
Oh, well...
Bovine pregnancy
Periods
Babies
Cooking
Her waistline
calves
Christmas dinner
periods (again)
babies (again)
IN fact anything that fits a stereotype.
And now you wonder why I gripe.
Now, in part, I write this here to tease
But women help not their case
By the likes of these.... Rewarded 1
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Ladies , I wish to distance myself...
..from the remarks of my learned but naive colleague! Ha Ha ! The ladies loved this one but it should be said they showed an ungracious tendency to gloat about it - so your eloquent counterpoint is welcome -though I'll never admit that publicly ! . I was quite pleased with the second verse in an onomata...whatever sort of way( I'm sure you get my drift (LOL)!)particularly lines 29 and 30 and 'vocabulary ' being the longest word in the stanza.And the fact that you found it amusing kind of proves the point it's making even if we don't want to admit it (-: ! Check out 'Jester' s comment about those 2 lines . Freudian or what ! Most gratifying of all your erudite critique - the opening word ! I fancy I won't often find you stuck for words ! thanks again - good stuff and it's been fun !
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scribbledthoughts
June 6, 2006
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