He saw it coming.
The fall.
That love did not in fact
conquer all.
De facto -
love must meet love
and a love must lose.
A man must choose.
The wages of sin
is death.
He held his breath -
bade love, so desired,
pass by
his eyes not made
to witness that contest
averted his gaze -
Man’s ways
are not those
of his Creator.
Let the greater
Good be served
though it may be
a bitter plate.
Accept your fate.
Love is not always free.
Sometimes we must
just
let it go.
Comments?
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all is fair in love and war, again??? lol
seriously (this time), i think of "you win some, you lose some" with this piece. But shouldnt it be..'Love is free. Let it go.' ? or maybe you'd like to give me the story behind this so i will understand (fishing!!!! lol)
Also, im not so convinced with the bitter plate part... do you just accept love because u think its fate? if u think its fate, then it shouldnt be bitter, is it? coz if its bitter...its never love in the first place.....if i go on, i would conclude that the love lost is the right love!!! grrrr.exlpain pls? i need to hear it from the expert!lol
confused (ha!)
Lynne
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Todays Crossword Solution.
Hey You ! Is this a critique or are just a fishing expedition ?! Okay , I'll explain , if only to justify my ( brilliantly poetic ! ) (lol )last line. He's in love but he has a love already . Something's got to give. So love is not always blissful and free.Sometimes you have to 'let it go '. And sometimes love has to lose. Hence the title. Q.E.D.
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"If love is a difficult thing forget it" Derek Walcott
After reading your poem suddenly this line of walcott came to mind.
Bit confused about the last line.
However it's a pleasent ride for me seeking the meaning of "losing love"
nice work
keep delighting us
JO. Rewarded 1
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Sounds like Mr. Walcott knew his stuff Jo. The answer to the last line is in my reply to Scribbledthoughts. Thanks for the kind comment.
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just let go
freakin good ending
a lesson everybody should
learn. Just let go! some
people can't comprehend
those words...
JUST LET GO!. Rewarded 1
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You're Young ..
..obviously ! Ever had to give up an addiction? Just letting go isn't always that easy.This poem and 'Cigarettes' are kind of about that same thing. I'm glad you enjoyed them and thanks for the kind comments. What I really wish is that such messages could make a difference with the problems they discuss. Old age and lessons hard learned tell me they can't - unfortunately. Doesn't mean they shouldn't get aired though. Thanks again 'gurl!
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"Doesn't mean they shouldn't get aired though."
Aired or ventilated let the breeze blow through... all without having to shake loose an awesome use of rhyme! I read it through the first time without noticing the rhyme at all, a sign of ultimate success! It may be due in part to enjambment and random placement, but mostly they just belonged there.
Line 27, do you really need the capital? (All the rest are fine.)
As for meaning, think of the great relief when it doesn't even matter anymore! There is a lot to be said for an uncomplicated life!
Terry. Rewarded 4
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I wont bore you with more compliments.I have always found your poetry to be an inspiration to think about how a poem should/could be put together.It seems to my lamen mind that you put a lot of thought into every piece which is why I love reading anything you post.. Rewarded 4
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Thanks once again JP for your very indulgent comment. I won't pretend I'm not hugely gratified even if I am a little embarrassed. Having your poems liked is a little like having your kids liked. Anybody who says they don't like it is a liar. Sorry for not rating it - but it would be inappropriate. Thanks again.
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Amazing !!!
Whenever i read ur pieces it has something in it which doesn't make me lift my eyes from it untill i find its true beauty !!! Its amazingly wonderfully beautiful !!! Really well done and keep writing .
~~~aBHI~~~
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Hugely flattering comment for which I can only say Thank you so much.
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beautiful
i think you have expressed yourself very well
the understanding of life and its bitter truth and all the more not living in a denial and facing it with strength. wow just wow.but just let go! though you do let go but u know it hurts as u put so much heart into something or someone and then you give in the hands of fate. it hurts..... though we let it go!
keep writing. Rewarded 4
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Thanks for the thoughtful comment. It's great to know somebody read an 'oldie' and liked it. Made me read it again and find I liked it too! Thank you for that. >W<
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scribbledthoughts
July 8, 2006