The city slumbers.
Each man lies in his catafalque,
Entombed in the legerdemain of his fantasies.
In the chimera of dreams he forgets
That he too shall be reduced to calyx.
Waking he is castigated, castrated, capitulated,
- caressed, careened, and cannulated.
He is callow in his rest as he was in his youth.
No blame: Time shall surrender him to infinity.
Tomorrow and tomorrow and yesterday and the day after
Float on Einstein’s river
And drift lazily to Eliot’s wasteland.
- This is divagation,
- But then what isn’t?
Blake despite his tigers and lambs
Crossed each brook stone by stone
- Some do fall in.
The bells toll four or against
But not for me.
A sound sublime, must chime in time to salvage
- from slime this rhyme
- then climb
Upon a limb to pluck a lime.
In syncopated rhythm
The chronometer staggers onward,
Lurching over Aurora
As the yolk of the sun
Oozes over the horizon.
Dream no more
The sun doth murder sleep.
A city rises.
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Nice ( and impressive ! ) to be able to 'fool around 'like this. When I wasn't groping for the dictionary it had moments of music. You have an awesome grasp of the language ( I think ! )as well as poet's heart which rattled the bars of its cage here from lines 10 and 11 (particularly nice) right up to line 23 where your tongue appeared to retreat back inside your cheek. Lines 24 to 28 were beautiful in sickening sort of way. Good ( if rather intimidating !) work!
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Thank you so much. I had to go back and look at the poem to see to what you were referring. Your St. Bernard poem sounds like you having fun.
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Wonderful!
This is positivly brilliant!
Your useage of vocabulay was equisite!
I loved the way this peice flowed and moved so smoothly.
Continue to inspire us!
Aileen C. Kendall. Rewarded 1
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Thank you for your kind comments. It has been an inspiration to write when surrounded by so much talent. don't you find it so?
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I was sent here by Windhover, and he was right: I love it!
Stream-of-consciousness at its finest, with effortless juggling of vocabulary to sigh for, offbeat yet precise, visiting Eliot and Blake to gather support for the clever pun in line 18, so it dares to have a run of six prime rhymes and a lime. Of them all,
lines 27 As the yolk of the sun
and 28 Oozes over the horizon. are just perfect for a breakfast sunrise!
In deference I say to you, you have made it superbly worth staying up 'til 1 AM to read and enthuse!
Terry
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Thank you. Although now I feel so stupid. Prime! Why didn't I think of that. How do so many of you know each other?
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Hi eosmia. It`s taken me a while and quite a few readings to enable the faculties to formulate a response. Following this thought-train is like riding the Disorient Express! Should there be this many cataracts on a stream of consciousness? You`ve had fun with this and so have I following its referances, picking up on its puns (line 10s relativity etc)and ..is divigation a neologism combining navigation and divination? Its a good idea with a twist of phrase and alteration of authored aphorisms to send an abundance of associations flying thru the readers head. Its almost a poetic whodunnit with fine lines and absorbing imagery to boot, concerning,it seems to me, time and our attitudes, biological and mental, towards its passage. Yes, you`re fooling around, eosmia, with our heads! Which is much appreciated!. Rewarded 4
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Your poem seems a cauldron, in which you put lots of characters and issues to find out if the final taste would be ok... like a poet's game! In this case, however, the taste of this poem is not ok. It is not a bad poem, for sure: one can see the richness of contents, the intriguing rhythm, but no definite line, like an intention, going along the reader's searching, just like a magic companionship... not that thing is not there. I think this is a good example of a good draft, and in my opinion this what this website is mainly useful for. Keep on the good work.
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okay
I bet if u took this poem and wrote a book with it((adding more of course). You would have a best seller on your hands! It was good, but more short story good.
So really, its a win win kind of thing!
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Windhover
July 10, 2006