It’s a beautiful house,
tall and stately.
But a place you feel at home
- completely.
Tidy enough to be smart.
Cluttered enough to be lucky.
Fully air-conditioned
but it’s warm inside.
All run and paid for
by a super-mum
and a great dad.
Made for family
a boy and three girls
as lovely as two parents
ever had –
more beautiful inside than out
and that’s saying something.
2 cats, one rabbit, one dog
And one small horse
called Betsy of course.
A spirit of welcome
the rock it was built on.
We stayed at this Hilton once.
Stole the towels
and wrote this
on the walls.
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Domesticitus Vandalitus
Haha! Great twist of an ending! It did make me chortle! it was unexpectedly expectorated atop a domestic soliloquy I was really feeling the green-eyed monster of envy towards! I apologise for this blurted comment that cannot qualify as a review, Windhover but I had to confide this inadvertent animadvert. Fine work!. Rewarded 1
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Funny
This poem is great, I love the rhythm, and the tone. The Rhyming is amusing and playfull. I just adore this poem from start to finsih. I think it's my favorite of your poems.. Rewarded 1
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thumbs up
haha hey,loved the ending,definitely NOT sth I expecxted to happen!It's got a nice flow and the picture's nice even though I liked imagining a different house in my head.Love all the stuff you write,hope you never stop writing!
lve,LW. Rewarded 1
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It always surprises me what people like. This was light-hearted 'thank you' note to my brother who showed us a great time on our holidays this year. I only posted it because I was going to be off the site for a week! Anyway - glad you liked it .
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Thanx Lily
Glad you liked this one . I felt it was bordering (!?) on sentimentality and tried to save it with some humour. Apparently I succeeded ! Your comment is very kind and much appreciated. >W<
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gnosisonG
July 20, 2006
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