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  • on Four walls by MoonLight Poet, on March 21, 2008

    Great

    It is very simple and to the point yet has great imagery. It also conveys the feeling of entrapment very well.

    language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.

  • on I am... by crazybassist601, on March 19, 2008
    Thank you. I really appreciate what has been read and the comments. I also am going to look over the beginning and try to fid a way to help the rhythm.

    The line that you pointed to is the line that troubles me the most. I do not know how to fix it, but I refuse to scrap it because it is the line that I can visualize the best in my head. I dont know what it will take to fix it though...