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Dirty clean poet

  • Last seen on Nov 25 6:43 PM. Member since August 11.
  • My mood is , and quote is "Happy".
  • I am a 18 year old guy (Great Britain)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm a student of English and History.
  • I have 43 comments

Poems I'm focused on

  • The Bottle’s First Love Song
    / The years no doubt, my friend, have changed me less / Than those moments with you which nurtured my mind; / And so right now I feel I must confess / To unformulated thoughts now refined, / Distinguished and concentrated on you. / / You f
    116 words, 7 comments, October 12. In Rhyme, Personal, Sad, Society, Hope, Life
  • Syrup Boy
    Syrup Boy loved sugar in whatever form it came, / From candy canes to ice cream, he ate sweetness everyday. / He’d have éclairs for breakfa
    224 words, 8 comments, September 16. In Weird, Humor, Dark, Death, Abstract, Childrens, Addiction, Life
  • Marcus and Rita
    There once was a boy born hollow and vacant, / With skin made of bark, but nothing within. / His folks named him Marcus, Marcus the Giant,
    204 words, 6 comments, September 6. In Fantasy, Society, Sad, Spiritual, Love, Life, Rhyme, Weird
  • the light sleeper
    Here we go again; will that last glass / Dull it, or will we be up again for hours? / Lying here listening to the night time sounds: / A far off ambulance screaming past, / The wind outside ushering in the rain / And the fighting and vomiting wh
    101 words, 4 comments, August 11. In Personal, Contemporary, Life, Society, Thoughts

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  • So copy us verbatim
    The girls with white washed faces / Stagger through the lamp lit street / Into the seediest embraces of / Someone they’ll never meet. / Th
    78 words, 2 comments, October 19. In Contemporary, Rhyme, Society, Sad, Life, Beat
  • to feel
    I wake up next to you / With that feeling, so real; / That unbelieving sense / That it’s no sin to feel. /
    18 words, October 19. In Rhyme, Personal, Love, Life
  • they never interract
    There’s a little girl / With spiders in her hair, / With grimy, yellow teeth / And a sullen sorry stare. / / There’s a little girl / With
    69 words, 3 comments, October 12. In Rhyme, Sad, Society, Life

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  • Brian Balzer : I love your background! on September 15
    However, it makes it difficult for me to read the words in front of it. Is there any way to change the color of the words to make them stand out? BKB

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Comments

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  • on Currency Abuse by Enoq, on October 14
    4th stanza, first line "a tempt" should be attempt, and the dollar signs are a good idea, but make the poem lose its rythm as it's hard to read

    however, i enjoyed this poem immensely- the image of a young person being made into a miser instead of achieving his aspirations is very strong, especially in the present economic climate.

    the ending hammers this home as well- "my heart is all consumed by the never ending greed"
    too many morals have gone down the pan due to money, and your message here is clear, well written and well received

    dcp
    xx

    . Rewarded 8

  • on The Bottle’s First Love Song by dirty clean poet, on October 12

    a love poem indeed

    that was the idea- which is why my line breaks are where they are; this started life as a sonnet so i've tried to stick as faithfully as possible to an iambic pentameter structure

    i just figured there are enough love poems about lovers out there, and it got me thinking of other forms of love

    cheers for the feedback
    dcp
    xx