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Erizona

  • Last seen on Sep 23 5:35 PM 2006. Member since July 2, 2006.
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  • on I no longer love you by sanity, on July 3, 2006

    beautiful

    im not sure how else to put it. you have written in such a sure, easy to follow way, that i am astonished you managed to keep a certain feeling and tone (a good one at that) through out the whole poem.  the words you use, simple as they may be, are perfect for the story you have imersed your readers into. also, you have brought up a subject many people can easily relate to, but may not be able to write it the way you so easily did.  i am a true lover of the piece and i am glad i was able to find it and enjo yit.

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  • on Taller by Windhover, on July 3, 2006

    a direct hit

    this is a very touching and well thought out piece. somehow you managed to confront a subject that, in general, is hard for some people to comprehend in less that a hundered words.  it stays true in its meaning and lights up a moment that, in my opinion, many people have and/or will have during their lifetime. though it is a short poem, its provides a genuine stregth with its simple words. proving that sometimes, shorter, smaller, and lighter can be greatly better.  i enjoyed your writing and the subject you decided to target.hope to hear more from you and bravo!

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