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  • on The Bumble-bee by Windhover, on May 15, 2007
    I particularly enjoyed the jumpy, shilly shallying rhythm and rhymes in this. A gentle, friendly and playful little story.

  • on Salt by Windhover, on April 22, 2007

    swell

    some really breath-taking lines here, W. "ermine slash" cliffs kneeling and kissing, gentle rhymes of shore/fjords. The "rains... a weak invading army" is the kind of line that will return to my mind to fulfil a view. Beautiful poetic eyesight conveyed, and a beautiful photograph too!

    The only comment I'll make, as I know I can trust you to, is that it doesn't quite feel edited. Rather, it feels like a layering of highly attuned impressions, which are themselves very beautiful, but which perhaps havn't had the crafting, sculpting hand that would make a finished "piece" - a sketch shall I say?

    A beautiful one, and well worth the read. All best, Ag.