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  • Brian Balzer : Let me be the first to sign your guest book. on September 17
    Shall I write you a poem
    so when you look,
    you'll see I was first,
    to sign your guest book.
    I think I should.
    I'll do just that,
    so call this a feather
    to stick in your hat!

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  • on Forever Lost by Brian Balzer, on September 17

    Great!

    Brian,

    I didn't leave a comment not because I wasn't impressed your poem, but rather because I was just reading a few poems here and there to get a feel for the site . I loved the simplicity, humor, and overall flow of this poem. It actually reminds me of the Shel Silverstein poems I used to read, just a little less eccentric, and I hope you take that as a compliment.

    I do agree with the reviewers below though, that the last two lines of the poem do throw off the flow and tone of the poem somewhat.

    However, I'm by no means anything of an authority on poetry , and I've just recently gotten into it, so these are just my tentative thoughts as a high school kid who feels like a one here (same goes to my own poetry haha).