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  • on Her or Them...Misunderstood by Jake Jackson, on August 8, 2005

    good

    I saw alot of gramatical errors. But the story itself is great. I think that the structure itself was different. It wasn’t that I didn’t like it, it was just different then what I am used to seeing. A couple things really confused me. One was the title I didn’t see how that fit the story. Also the last line. “and died down into my grave” I didn’t think that that sounded right. Also I didn’t understand why you put the why? at the end. The story was great but overall I think that a couple changes here and there could make it even better. Keep up the great work!
    ♥Kate

    language: 3, rhythm: 1, subject: 5, tone: 1, form: 2.

  • on still love you by , on August 6, 2005

    Awesome

    Well I have to say the only person that can really make that descion is you. But if you love him and you think that he loves you back then why not. I don’t know what he has done to you, so that might be wrong though. Do what you heart tells you. And in line 4 if I were you I would change the 24/7 to every, I think that it might sound better. I hope that everythign works out for you, and you figure out what to do.
    Good luck!
    ♥Kate

    language: 1, rhythm: 2, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 4.