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Road-intelligent

She gets things muxed ip
but everyone,it seems,
knows
exactly what she means.
So
‘Join the boat’ is like
‘we’re in the same club’ -
Get it?
I do.
It’s perfection.
I just somehow always know.
She says we have a ‘psycho’ -
connection!

I thought I’d stop
finding it cute
but I’m a galoot-
I still think it’s sexy
in some way.
She was trying to say
she was ‘street-wise’
one day
but it came out as
‘road-intelligent’.
It took me a while
to figure out
this has nothing to do with being
fucked senseless.
We live in hope.

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  • Terry-too
    November 15, 2006
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    Bunny stuff?

    Don't get that wrong, the laugh was worth it.

    Generally tho, because of my young grandkids, all the computers in this house are set at prekindergarten exclusion, slight exaggeration, but in AP and elsewhere, there are a fair number of bunnies about. They seem to multiply as rabbits are wont to do.

    You even snuck in some rhymes, but there was such a warm tone I missed them on first reading.

    I love surprises.
    Terry

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  • Sandi Alford
    November 13, 2006
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    Definately all in the same boat sometimes!

    LOL The point of deliverance isn't always what we are hoping for, but somehow the mind makes a connection!

    Quite entertaining musing going on over here, I'm still giggling with your conclusion!


    Blessings Sandi

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    • Windhover gold member
      November 13, 2006
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      Gad it glave u a giggle

      a laugh is as good a response as this one hopes to get. It evolved out of a conversation quite naturally. All I had to do was write it down. Thanks for giggling! >W<


  • LittleCrimsonJester
    November 6, 2006
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    Wonderful

    This is a fun poem and in a way reminds me of the way a friend of mine and I talk. Anyone else would think we were saying things wrong but the two of us have always talked like that. A mixed up poem, but it's fun I really like it.
    -Red-

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    • Windhover gold member
      November 7, 2006
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      Thanks Red ! Always like to hear you smile ! (See, she's got ME doing it now!)


  • scribbledthoughts
    November 4, 2006
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    hmmmm, sounds familiar....

    ....like some of my mixed up thoughts and messages.hehe...something like scrambledthoughts that used to be stubbornthoughts thats just suppose to be scribbledthoughts. ha!

    I like the funny, conversational style of this one Mr. W - street wise or road intelligent - its cute, smart ass, LOL!

    S

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  • Lad silver member
    November 3, 2006
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    Off to Borders I go

    Bird, just wanted to thank you for the tip on the Cameron book.  Tomorrow I'll check it out at Borders.
    Ciao.  Lad ae wot! -- did I get it right, mate

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  • celestialpie gold member
    November 3, 2006
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    Very clever, you devil.    I love it!


  • Lad silver member
    November 2, 2006

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    Post Fab

    Bird, you have placed before us a little ditty of muxed ip delight, ending in a missing luttle fick of hope -- aw, shucks.  Fantastic!  A welcome turnaround in mood from Pre Fab.  Live ot.
    Chow.
    Lad

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    • Windhover gold member
      November 3, 2006
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      Thanks peterpanman

      One reason I carry a tatty little notebook in my pocket is to write down ideas like this when they come into my head. This one had been kicking around (alongside 'recombobulate' by the way) for some time. Figured I  needed to change the mood a little. Hope it made you laugh as much as it did me when I had the idea. She'd like you - you speak the lingo!But if she finds out I wrote this she'll probably say "Windhoover - you suck!"     Chihuahua     >W<


      • Lad silver member
        November 3, 2006
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        Stop it, Bird!

        I can't get back to scribbling from laughing; the blarney is harmy, disarming my rhymey.  So, serious up, buzzard, or it'll be:
        Ciao Forever.
        Peanutbutterman.  

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