Beauty stood naked and shivering
before the Queen of Hearts
asking for dignity
not daring to look upon a woman
so powerful and with such majesty
what do you want it for?
asked the Queen
that I might show it to the one I adore
answered Beauty
and why do you come here?
to implore you for what only you can bestow
but Beauty, know you not who I am?
look closer
that your dreams may come to pass
and Beauty looked
but saw only the looking glass
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This is quite beautiful, quite elegant. I love the flow and detail and the twist ending, it makes me think of Alice in Wonderland
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I have always been a fan of fairy tales, in fact some could say I am a little bit obsessed with them. And I found this a lovely collaboration of several tales. It was different enough that it stayed interesting without being too different and not showing the story well enough. Thankyou for an amazing piece of work
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Thanks Friday
Glad you liked this one as I kind of like it myself. Not for the first time, someone's comment shows me something in my writing that I never intended but shouldn't have missed. I honestly never intended to invoke 'Alice through the looking-glass' as strongly as I did. Hopefully it doesn't detract from the main message of the poem. Thanks for reading and commenting. Windhover.
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Fairy tales . . .
. . . I never outgrew them. As Lad has already noted, this is a wistful song worthy of a troubador. It would have been right at home at the height of romantic renaissance poetry. In such simple, seemingly artless lines, you have given us a profound glimpse at the nature of beauty-- its power, its deception and its allure.
Pie
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Wonderful
There is not much to say about this poem except that it flows well and is well worded. One thing I would like it if you added parentheses for the speaking part just to make it more clear who is talking. This poem is wonderful I really like.
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There's not really much I can say about this poem. You send an interesting message out in this poem, (as Lad described so well) and the flow of the poem is fine indeed.
A good work,
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My favorite Irish troubadour...
...sings his lovely riddle, voice soft, bow at his fiddle. He sings of the reversed desires of the Queen and of Beauty (usually the other way around) with a flip, a fillip, of his mind in his lines. He sings: Be easy, all you who search for the beautiful self in the elusive beautiful world. His lyric is this: Beauty is as Beauty does...within, without reflection.
Your purest, Bird. Your utterly most lyrical. Your heart-mind at its easiest ease.
Lad
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