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Seasons

Predictablity gives in to change
Untill change becomes predictable
The paradox of the human experience
Making now last forever
Making forever- bearable

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  • William McGarvey silver member
    February 8, 2007

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    Great poem

    I like how the poem starts with seasons then compares it to how us humans deal with reality.
    The first two lines are true genius. Once we start to get comfortable with a situation and take it for granted, it changes. And when we start to get used to the chaos of change, it becomes stable.

    A great poem with a few well selected words. I’m looking forward to reading more of your poetry!

    Cheers,

    Bill


  • celestialpie gold member
    February 9, 2007

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    There is such power in brevity-- no room for BS. Just a clear, direct vision, the bare bones of a poetic message. And, like the subject matter of this poem, it also lends a timeless quality to your work.

    The last two lines, I imagine, are going to stick with me for a long time.

    I look forward to seeing more of your work.
    Pie


  • Lad silver member
    February 18, 2007

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    I like it.

    Trew, this sure has crystallized thought in it, as a brief meditation on our human capacity to hold on to what we've finally become accustomed to - so that our lives can become "bearable."

    I do, though, sense a fuller poem lurking inside this one (maybe you'll expand on it in another new poem?). This one seems to me to call for some detail, some example out of experience to move it from pure thought and give it some flesh and blood. But that's just an impulsive thought of mine. As it stands now, the poem is a very good read for me: thoughtful and wise.

    Lad