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The Cradle Tree.

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Dappled hues streaming
Light as emerald sparkle
Filtered through an insect eye
A rustling symphony showers
Sound widening an infant
World smells of sap,
Laden leaf and blossom.
Touching rough bark
Tasting the green air
As his cradle tips to and fro
Beneath a soothing canopy

 


Later, on that endless Summer day
A boy with frayed shorts and scuffed knees
Climbing Jack’s beanstalk to discover
A land richer than he dared imagine
Sitting on the shoulder of a friendly giant
Gazing at the undulating roll of field and forest
And a vast majestic sky

 


Taller, a gangling youth carving the name of the girl he will marry
Into the furrowed trunk of the Cradle Tree whittling away childhood
Stealing a kiss in its shade prizing open new worlds of pain and delight
A book worm among the caterpillars feasting on images of thought
Hiding from someone calling his name



Then a mother´s tears falling like raindrops dripping from sodden foliage
Leaning a shoulder on the sturdy oak, waving, white hair like dead flowers
A father, vague, obscured by the sylvan shadows cast against the cottage wall
Branches of the Cradle Tree swaying, like arms reaching out to pull him back
Walking away to a war far beyond his roots



Now beneath a different tree – straight beams planed smooth glint of nails, standing upright listening to accusers; a summary of judgment passed in accord with Draconian law - desertion, dereliction of duty. Duty to whom? Straining to hear above the constant whistling tintinnabulations piercing his ears - itching, scraping soft neck on coils of harsh coarse hemp tightening throat, shaking head declining the Gift of cloth to cover his eyes feeling a heavy tread approach from behind, a gnarled hand firm on his shoulder, creak of wooden gears grinding cogs, urinating, shame, falling...



staring up at emerald

butterflies chasing clouds

leafy breeze summoning

the haze of summer long

shadows creeping across bark

marking the passage

of endless daze

dreaming drowsily of

warm arms and

smiling sighs rocking

gently to and fro back

and forth hanging

from hemp cords

beneath

 

the Cradle Tree.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Rock-a-bye Baby, on the treetop

When the wind blows the cradle will rock

When the bough breaks the cradle will fall 

And down will come Baby, cradle and all. 

Can you hear the creak of hemp?

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  • mr backwards
    November 16, 2007
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    another great piece, gG. Trees are great symbolism, and well-placed allusions invoke a "tree of life" feel to the composure. we need trees, our species always has, and yet we take them for granted.
    This can be used as a metaphor for many things. A nice open-ended poem to stimulate thought.

  • bowmore bill
    July 15, 2007

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    very well written

    I liked this piece on the whole, having said that however i think that the first verse and the last verse put together sum up the whole piece.
    Ps, this is an opinion and not a critisism.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      July 15, 2007
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      Cheers Bowmore

      Very kind of you to comment and thanx for your opinion.
      Warm regards
      gG


  • Kiddy
    June 8, 2007
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    Dear gG.....

    Answer me…
    this poem has brought Edgar Allen Poe, Dan Brown, Robert Frost, John Keats, P. B. Shelley, R. K. Narayan in my mind…. WHY?

    Kiddy understood the poem…. But standing collapsed not to know what to comment……
    Lolz
    Kiddy

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  • Nienna Colle
    March 10, 2007

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    Ok, man, I don't know how you did it but I thought of the nursery rhyme as I was reading it. I see the connection, but it's fuzzy and hazy...I think the only part I see clearly right now is "down will come baby, cradle and all" as the hanging. To me it seemed you extended this summer day (which for some reason I assume the lullaby is being sung on) to being a life and through the stanzas, you tell a story of that life, kind of following the nursery rhyme (I may just be taking the nursery rhyme too seriously; perhaps it wasn't connected at all) and the end is that creak of hemp I heard. It was good, but probably not my gG favorite. Nice stuff though. Hope that suffices as a critique, I'm not used to getting up so early on weekends.

    N3

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  • oldsmoke
    March 9, 2007

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    gG, theres so much intensity packed into this poem. The marriage of the beauty of the old nursery rhyme, the sincere joys of life and the dark presence of reality gives this poem a lot of power. The steady reintroduction of the cradle tree really provides the contrast between the purity and innocence of youth and the inevitable hardships of later life. Thanks for sharing.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      March 10, 2007
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      Cheers Oldsmoke

      I could almost have used your present signature picture as the image for this one - it makes me giddy looking closely at it!
      And thank you for sharing your generous comment.
      Regards
      gG


  • jera jam
    February 27, 2007

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    "scraping soft neck on coils of harsh coarse hemp tightening throat, shaking head declining the Gift of cloth to cover his eyes feeling a heavy tread approach from behind, a gnarled hand firm on his shoulder, creak of wooden gears grinding cogs, urinating, shame, falling..."

    Is this not a reference to some kind of hanging? It sounds to me like a deep, twisted horror of exectution, and the irony of using wood and "hemp" for such a task. But I suppose the horror really begins to be suggested with "Mother's tears" and the father waling to war.

    The more I read into this poem, the more seems to be going on. Perhaps I'm getting over excited. Very nicely told though! It's a treat to hear a story.

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      March 10, 2007
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      Thanx again Jera Jam

      Yepp the poor bloke is hanged but amidst the doom and gloom, the gallows does not in this case signify the end. It s the boy as a young man walking off to a war that transforms him by the way.
      Very kind of you to expand on your thoughts.
      Cheers.
      gG


  • celestialpie gold member
    February 27, 2007

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    It's always great to get a new piece from you, gG, and as usual, you offer your mastery of language and imagery. Have you read The Giving Tree? Since you mention your fascination with fairy tales and nursery rhymes (which I share-- a mere stone's throw from mythology), you would love The Giving Tree. It's a children's book that, like your poem, follows a man's life in relation to a tree. I am also reminded of a story a teacher read to us back in elementary school, of the story of a tree's journey from forest, to become the cross upon which Christ was crucified.

    As Dee mentinoed, trees as a motif yield an abundance of associations, and with good reason.

    And back to the bonds shared between myth and foklkore, this poem also reminded me of Odin-- the Hanged Man.

    The thing that struck me as most clever about this piece (and, like Lad, there is always something diabolically clever about your wordplay), is the way you varied the line structures. The beginning was soft, but dense and poetic as a nursery rhyme, then as maturity and reason take over, you went to prose. Then, as death came, into a widening gyre of metaphysical art. Well played!

    Cheers,
    Pie

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  • Terry-too
    February 25, 2007

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    I lived a lifetime in it...

    There is a fine organization in this poem, reference always to the tree rather like a leitmotiv in a Wagnerian opera, a repeated piece of melody, not intrusive but recurring at intervals, verse by verse.

    Verse one, the small, hanging cradle in the tree, verdant peace.

    Verse two, the small boy's view from the tree he climbed, lines a little longer to match growth.

    Verse three, the tree as witness to growing up, into maturity. lines longer still.

    Verse four predicting premature old age of parents in his mother's tears as he must leave off to war. Infinitely sad, as if predicting. . . .
    (the possessive needs apostrophe)

    Verse five the painful realities describe the extended minutes leading to the hanging-- the time slowed by circumstance....
    more later.

    The end, double-spaced in a different reality goes back to the emerald peace of the cradle tree, the death-scene replaced by reference to the way we'd started.

    A word about the very real sensation of slow-time at a time of imminent death (Here I must support it from own experience as the car I was driving alone hit black ice and bounced wheels up high into the air to land on its roof in a gully below the highway.) It took a long time to get there. I watched the contents of my purse, open on the seat beside me, "rising" out and could not reach to tuck them back. It took such a long time! Weightlessness, unaware I was upside down too, the sudden 'Whump' as the car bounced off its roof to flip back onto its wheels, the roof crushed on the passenger side! Except for a bruise from my lap-belt and a lump on my head, I was uninjured, but it took so long to get there! Even longer for police to find me, as reported by passengers in a following car. Long enough to know that Life is a privilege.

    This extended awareness of time in the gallows scene lent it all a verisimilitude that will stay with me for a long time. The event I described happened in the late 1970's and I had almost forgotten. Time does not quite stand still but might as well. There was a key that drifted out that I never did find, perhaps still in the lock of Time. . . Put there by the Master's Touch in this poem.

    (There seemed to be a fair number of dactyls in the comfortable meter)

    A final point:
    A larger space under the poem would have been nice.
    "Author notes" kills the mood, suddenly.

    Thank you for this.
    Terry

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 27, 2007
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      Perceptions of Time

      Time like the tides? Time swallowing lives like a maelstrom (or a mire)? Or time like a ripplefree pool - a mirror to the sky?
      You hit the nail on the noggin for sure Terry. Time passing and our peceptions pervading its passage. I can relate to your startling anecdote of vehicular topsy-turvyness!
      CT was one of those pieces written beyond the self at its inception but needed an extensive rewrite to engender the time-flow nature of its storyline. (This was indeed truncated by the too sudden authors notes - rectified now. Cheers).
      To see beyond time is one thing; to BE beyond time another, essentially beyond our control.
      I felt after reading through again, the main character to be blissfully unaware of portents presaging a tragic end. Life is an accumulation of little deaths it seems to me, Terry. The death of childhood, whittled away, death of innocence, death of a parental wing when leaving the nest, death of freewill when drawn into churning fate, death of idealism (Duty to whom) and of course...
      just death.
      But with every death there is rebirth - and this is where the final stanza chimes an optimistic note.
      I was attempting in the hermetic fashion to combine "zoe" (longterm cyclical time) with the image of the tree/nature and "bios" (shortterm mortality) with the fickleness of human fate.
      The "idea" of the tree dies also as it transforms into a gallows, but it too is reborn in the closing stanza.
      Perhaps the key to understanding time lies in accepting its impermanency which indeed makes it last forever.
      Line 29 bothered me for a while, Terry. There was a constant echo of someone calling my own name from a misty past - but then I finally realised who it was.
      With your sublime comment I know you do too.

      Cheers and please send my heartfelt regards to your former pupil.

      gG


  • jera jam
    February 25, 2007
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    Shockingly beautiful

    A real journey this one! Such a lot of strong sharp images to take in that it is really hard to know how or when the final horror takes hold. A lovely, subtle, timeless story. Thanks!

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 27, 2007
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      Much Appreciated, Jera Jam

      Thnx for your kind uplifting comment and an interesting point - when does the horror take hold?
      Line 32 s "dead flowers" hinting at mortality? When I look over it I do spot a melancholy pervading the piece. A nostalgia for childhood perhaps, or a subliminal presage of tragedy ahead.

      Cheers
      gG


  • Lisa Milligan
    February 25, 2007

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    The neverending circle

    You already know how amazing I think this is. Let me try to be more specific. The imagery is stellar. My favorites are Lines 39-48, but they can't be the strong images they are without the rest of the piece. I admire how you choose your words and weave them into a rich tapestry of a life story. I was lulled along the way until the grim realities of Lines 29-37. And then you go back to the sad beauty of Lines 39-48, to end with a "return to the "heaven" of infancy." Sorry, I know that wasn't an original thought, but I couldn't have put it better myself...and sorry if I'm off a little bit.

    I really like the format, changing back and forth. It reads very clearly and smoothly. I wish I could do it justice, but this is the best way I can express what I feel about it. I'm so glad you posted it.

    Fantastic gG.

    Lisa


    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 25, 2007
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      Good Bye Cycle

      Thanx a million Lisa! You more than do it justice with your kind and positive words. It is your fault it s up here after all!
      It s too long to send to a competition anyway.
      You are right about the strength of lines 39-48 lying in their cohesiveness with the rest and I did enjoy the emerald butterflies=leaves bit - it might ve been pretty cheesy on its own but the image of the poor(?) bastard staring up at the sky and seeing his childhood CradleTree in his dying/awakening moments with urine running down his leg, shellshocked etc certainly gives the cheddar a bittersweet roquefort pungency (at least for me). I get a big kick out of building up an "imposing" structure and then exposing the entrails/wires/stickytape upholding the ramshackle edifice as in the fourth stanza which sets up (hopefully) a ghastly type of beauty in the last.

      Cheers Lisa

      gGrateful


  • Windhover gold member
    February 25, 2007

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    Yes..

    ..and I can feel the itch of its coarseness on soft skin. gG it's great to see you return - both here and to this kind of form. This one distills and focuses a lifetime and the major issues of freedom and war into so relatively few, brilliantly chosen lines. From birth to death and beyond. The first time I read it I wondered had it anything to do with my 'mother' image from my Croke Park poem (thank you for the comment by the way) but on this my third read, I can't see why I thought so, except perhaps at a totally intuitive level and the clear presence of a military court. Whatever, it's great to see such inimitable quality restored to us. Great write. >W<

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 25, 2007
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      And Thereby Hangs A Tale...

      Cheers Windhover! I m afraid it was conceived before I had the pleasure to read your emminent Croke Park. It was the last of that singular burst I had a few weeks back of which I sent you the first 4 or 5 - there being 10 in all. I liked CT because it was perhaps the most distant from the quirks and quandries of my own personal mess. Hows that for escapism. The theme of hanging has been on my mind of late (as evinced in Hemp Enables Cain also) as there are a great many symbolic metaphorical mental physical slants to be gleaned. Just the living/dead tree element in CT f.ex. And there s the actual rhythm of the pendulum-like hemp as Lad so kindly mentioned which I tried to equate with the first and last stanzas rhythmwise. Oh and do not fret my friend I m not going to hang myself. Too much of a cliche.

      gG


  • nish81
    February 25, 2007

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    A brilliant poem. No, I think the correct word here is, again, 'epic' - a poem of epic proportions, that captures the lifespan of a person. Your choice of words provides the correct mood/atmosphere for each section of the poem, and your rhythm with the progression of the poem can be linked to the rhythm of the boy/man's life as time passes.
    What I'm trying to say is that you've written a poem where time passes through the poem: the poem doesn't just capture a single moment, encapsulate a thought or convey a rant. With poems where time passes, often it is hard to get the rhythm right and time will pass to slowly or too quickly - not with yours.

    good job,

    nish(81)

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 25, 2007
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      Thanx Nish81

      I m gratified you mentioned the time/progression boy to man equation. It lies at the heart of this poem and it took more than one rewrite to figure it out (as adequately as I ve been able). What finally clicked was the tense using present tense and ing endings as much as possible added a sense of timelessness to it I felt. Each verse grows like a life, in this case cut short.
      One of my alltime favourite song/lyrics is Springsteen´s The River which is a perfect epic of lives budding and disappointing. Dire Straits´ Telegraph Road is another.
      I was trying to let this piece evolve and ultimately DEVOLVE.

      Cheers a million for bringing up this aspect Nish.

      gG

  • dave ochs silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    hey gG

    the cradle tree has thawed from winters frost and has budded new leafs for the spring to bring aid, comfort, security, beauty and quiet inspiration to those in need.

    man I'm glad your...I mean its back

    dave

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 25, 2007
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      Ta Dave!

      Tis great to be back, though February is taunting us with a cold spell and March Winds loom. But hell the warmth received from Sharepoets would thaw Jack Frost into a steamy puddle.
      And Spring is indeed on the way!

      BooiinnggG


  • Lad silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    Poetically pure as a cradle...

    ...endlessly rocking. A biography of a man from blank, accepting innocence, through his wonder at the world, to his cruel but accepted murder, and back to his innocent wonder again. It may even be a larger metaphor for the earth herself, slowly being transformed from a cradle-tree into a hanging gibbet for its children, us. Duty to whom? indeed.

    Our vaunted historical ever-progress from dark to light? No. The other way around, I fear.

    Powerfully unsettling all the way. The endless rocking like a pendulum swinging. And down comes baby, cradle AND ALL. If "hope springs eternal in the human breast," what happens when the breast itself is buried for dereliction of duty? - duty to humanity. I'm so taken with its images, that I can't even be energized to quote its many beauties.

    I like this immensely...and reluctantly, gG. Brilliantly conceived and expressed.

    Lad

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 25, 2007
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      Cheers Lad

      I ve always had a fascination with nursery rhyme-like innocence and the harsh truthes borne beneath - Ring a Ring of Roses (about the black death plague) Little Cock Robin (murder) Jack and Jill (regicide?). Couched in childlike terms or "beauteous" prose true horror after sinking below the subliminal surface, should strike a powerful salient chord. I think if I had a windmill to chase it would be: writing about ugliness with such beauty as to lift aboination to the state of revelation.
      The inherently pessimistic vibe in CT is I think belied by an underlying view of perception and how we can evoke our own slant on vexistance since the thread of reality´s fabric is so loose. Kind of a Buddhist thing I know but no doubt a source of comfort for people facing horrors. The character here discovers that which is... optimistic?

      gGratitude extended to you Lad! Thanx!

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