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A Dance of Pink Rose Petals

We stroll along a lonely trail
Through beams of sunlight bright yet pale
Through your silkly black hair
A serene wind began to sail
We strode through a forest
That was written for an enchanted tale
I watched longingly at my beautiful brown goddess
How she looked so strong alone

Yet..

When in my arms...

So frail
I contemplated that thought listfully as we hiked that lonely trail
Until finally we reached a quiet clearing
And you turned to me and pulled on my shirt
And into an embrace that was most endearing
With a kiss that was white-hot and searing
A kiss that signaled that a time of elation was nearing

Our bodies lay down to rest in the grass and pink rose petals
And for a time, I tightly wrapped my arms around my lass
Only to be hypnotized by her charms
My gaze remains locked on her eyes
As her hands move to my waist
And mine towards her thighs
With an upward push she begins to remove my shirt
And with a downward thrust I remove her skirt

For I desire to taste the waters
Of her secret cave
As I remove her final undergarment
Her legs tremble with anticipation
As my toungue delves into her succulent waters
She gasps in delight
Her hands clasp at the pink rose petals
As her legs enlock themselves around my neck
Turning day into night
Until finally, I reaped the fruits of my toungue's labour
As my lips tasted a great flood of nectar
Her lips parted and drew in a great breath
Her nails cut into my hand
Her thighs tightened to a point I almost couldn't stand
Until finally her legs released me
From the afterthroes of an orgasm
So grand

And so we continued to make love long past sunset
Until Luna peeked her head above the clouds
Like a celestial lady hiding behing gray shrouds
Spying on two lovers locked in Love's trance
Two lovers locked in a passionate dance
A Dance of Pink Rose Petals

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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    March 24, 2007

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    I definetly enjoyed this. A nice and beautiful way of speaking of making love but also i felt the passion behind it. Great work


  • poeticsoul1
    March 24, 2007
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    Very nice.


  • dogboy
    March 30, 2007

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    yea

    a little cliche, might not work on some of the chicks i know but the structure was great and the rhymes wern't forced...pritty good


  • May 18, 2007

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    excellent

    you know i love this poem it makes me think of wat you can do and what youve done great job i love it