I am lost
Don't know what to think anymore
He left me just like that
No good bye
No wornings
Nothing
Just left after 3 months
Thought we were happy
But now I'm not to sure.
Not to sure what to think
What do I do now
Love of my life
Gone
I'm lost
Not to sure
What to feel
Not to sure
Of anything
Not sure Why I am even writing this
Not sure if life was weorth getting hurt like this
Not to sure
Not to sure
Not to sure!!
Please tell me what you like about my poem! Thanx
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Good one! It moves like a song and it feels like a song, especially the last couple of lines. In some places the beats are a bit off, so you might want to fix that. Good job on this one, I feel the hurt in it. Did it actually happen? If it did, I offer my condolences. Good one!
-Colin
PS. If this really did happen, bear in mind that each experience produces wisdom and poetry. In this case, good poetry. -
it good
its good but i think the flow u can make much better.i also think that the feel is like a song. when the flow is there it is best poem . there is somethink missing in it.i can't feel it more !! -
You need to work on it...it could flow a little better.....you need to be a little more desprictive...make me feel your pain
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Hey,
To be off balance after a sudden break-up is natural. This is a nice poem expressing those feelings.
Nice read
Bill
Colin Night
April 19, 2007
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