when I was a kid
and even a young man
I couldn't figure why
old people
made such a fuss
about scenery
Now that I'm older
I think that they
may
have been right
a change in the light
can take my breath away
and you look like a sunrise
my eyesight is shot
but I can see more
clearly now
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Great!
Really, really like it.it really woth while take the time to read it carefully.Original, well written, deep meaned, significant, relevant, enjoyable and exact.For what you say and how you say it.For the saubject and the forms.This deserved to be readed once more.Regards from Ludmila.
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John, I'm afraid I got here late, and everything to praise about this poem has already been praised, so I will just say that I agree with the comments I see here already-- this is a wonderful, reflective piece about the benefits of growing older and wiser-- and, like everyone else, I love the final three lines especially-- beautiful and heartbreaking with their clarity.
XOXO,
Lauren
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I loved the first stanza. Kids might go wow at "scenery" But you really get to appreciating beauty as you grow older. When those fabulous images of nature, especially the ones that you have personally witnessed, stick in your head. Now, I don't know how is my opinion of scenery going to change when I am 50, but I definitely take in a lot more when i see a sunset, than I used to when I was 12. I loved the way you used this to convey about the maturity that seeps in, and the way you can enjoy things that life has to offer better, despite the handicaps that age brings in.
Very poetic write.. Rewarded 8
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beautiful scenery
...and I think it gets better when you've come full circle and seen it all.
a calm poem, JOhn. I like it.
Lynne
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hey W
yes, finally you've come of age and can appreciate lifes nuances and subtelty's. with age comes wisdom. a nice light poem with a fine ending.
dave. Rewarded 4
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I agree, morning's minion.
More times than not, "old people" "may" know things that "younger" ones ignore - and isn't that an ancient lament of and between the ages? I'm glad that the poet sees "more clearly now" as he gazes at his love through "eyesight" "shot" by years but also shot as by a camera. Appealing poem, open and clear as new eyes.
Lad
Nice to see a new poem, John. For a while there, I thought you might be fading away from us.. Rewarded 6
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Old poets never fade away
You should know that. Hey Lad, thank you for even noticing. Got a lot going on just now and sometimes I wonder about my 'dry spell' myself. But I don't worry. I'll be off again when I'm off again. I'm never far away but I do apologize for being so slow off the mark in reading and critiquing lately. Bear with me! Thanks for reading and commenting here as always. My Best. >W<
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