Want means what it says
It's an insatiable word
what we lack we want
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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very true. reminds me of the calvin and hobbes quote: reality continues to ruin my life. hah
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Calvin and Hobbes RULE!
This is the coolest compliment I ever got here! I'd say something nice to you but it might jeopardize my membership of G.R.O.S.S ! Ha Ha! Thanks Face! >W< -
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hahah calvin and hobbes is the shit. i quote them way too much. but we have so much to learn from them
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Does this mean you're over your aversion to haiku? I hope so, if it means you produce more like this. I love the circular, simple logic of this piece-- logical, yet elegant. I feel like it's the slow circle-turn of a dance. Very nice, and tantalizing.
XOXO,
Lauren
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Hey Cutie
How are you little one? Well on the mend I hope. I think you misunderstand about my aversion to haiku 'as a form'. I like it like this - a stand-alone , short, hopefully sharp, witticism, anecdote, observation, riddle, truism - whatever! I think its meant to be ultra-succinct and therefore NOT used as a structure, repeating in stanzas. I don't believe it's Japanese incipients ever intended it to be used like that, rather that it is the transistor, or microchip of poetry.
I love that you think this has a 'circular' quality, like a dance step. Microchips could be similarly described! Thanks for you sharp and ever adept observations as always. >W<
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Oh how true
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...that's the feeling I get from this one's clever brevity, John. I like its circularity, the way it stretches and snaps back like a small rubber band from its first word to its last without moralizing, only observing. Nicely done.
My only thought is that the first line might be a bit more present as "Want is what it says"? Minor thought. And another: I hear the last line as "lacking what we want" - but again, leaving it unchanged does nothing to take away its wit.
As to your recent 'dry spell,' there's little like a haiku/senryu puzzle to bring us some moisture, no?
Pleasure to enjoy.
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well... the second line delivers the punch!! perhaps, the line 1 is something which i think could be richer. Don't know how though! And the third line... well the phrase "beauty in simplicity" fits perfectly for that one. Cheers HM
HM
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