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Jesus and Jackson Pollock


If I could die like Jesus
hamming it up at center stage
my impact could be tremendous.
I would change
the world with a sigh
if only I could die

like that,
red spackled and battered blue,
egg tempera on a canvas mat,
drooping cracked on my easel for you.
re-mixing the palette of the pagan sun
making all of the other colors run

bleeding from confining lines.
I will transcend the I and Thou
by pulling in my pinned
down edges, come down
from this salty old cross,
blend with your triumph and loss.

Please tell me what you think

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  • Windhover silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    Quite a canvas

    Hi Brandon. I had the overwhelming impression I'd seen something very similar to this from you before (salty christ, cross etc.?) If its a developement or a re-work - it works. The comparison of Christ crucified to a canvas pinned to an easel is gloriously irreverent and poetic. You'll burn in Hell of course, but there's always crucifixion as last-gasp remedy. Great write. >W<

  • dave ochs silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    hey bill

    who'd of thought one could draw any type comparison between christ and pollack but somehow you make them bleed together. a very unique and fresh write.
    dave

    . Rewarded 4


  • Freddy...
    October 18, 2007
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    Bizzare

    How very unique! ! It isn't every day that I hear of Jesus being spoken about in the same sentence as Pollock but, may i add, Its not every day i see a poem so well written. Every one of my congratualations on the use of language, the harsh language really does help to create the image I believe you are trying to.

    Thank you. FRED.

  • Dun
    October 20, 2007

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    You seem to have issues with Jesus...

    He was a nice fella, you know that, don't you? Far too much heed is paid to that way he died and not enough to what he taught. He's got some really good material and is a very progressive thinker. Me, I really like his material. This seems to have a very mocking air to it like you are a conflicted Christian running from Jesus, cuz you seem pissed at the whole Jesus thing. Is that true, Bill? This poem has been reworked many times and this latest installment seems to have more vitriol imbued into it. You seem angry at Jesus. Are you in contempt at the concept? A disbeliever? If so, why the preoccupation with this figment of your imagination? I have with some fascination watched this transmogrification of your fixation on this Jesus disbelief mockery. I am fascinated to know the truth behind your belief concerning this. You obviously need a new cult figure to worship as you appear wholly disallusioned with your present one. Talk to me, Bill. Oh, and by the way, pleased to meet you, hope you guess my name. I think what's puzzling you is the nature of my game.

    Al