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Rivets

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Take my everyday and bend it.
Shatter my inner peace
then mend it.
It's alright.
I know I'm doomed
to be consumed
in my own burning

What fills me best is yearning

not just to win or to succeed.
A man should bleed.
I need not just to survive
but to feel, see, hear and taste
that I'm alive.

What use are things?
I want a heart that sings
like a fairground jukebox
and a soul that dances and spins
Like a waltzer.
I don't want pain but I'll bear it
just so I might feel this way again.
What good is constant sunshine without rain?
A life filled to the brim but always the same
would kill me - or at least I'd want it to.

High has no meaning on a plateau.
Give me highs and lows
and let me ride this roller coaster,
hang on the edge and feel the g’s.
Winch me to dizzying danger-
then drop me please.
Let me feel the roaring breeze
and the thrill inside
as I hurtle
towards oblivion,
confident in the rivets
that hold this ride together.





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This is a fairly extensive edit of an older poem called 'High', recently resurrected.

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  • riveralex gold member
    October 29, 2007

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    Parallel process...

    this and my "once", not going to let that god-damned light go out.

    "I don't want pain, but I'll bear it" and "a life filled to the brim but always the same would kill me - or at least I'd want it to." Such an elegantly articulated call to life.

    I love the image of the rivets holding this ride, this life, together... we don't think of that, do we. We think we're in a ship...spaceship Earth - hurtling towards oblivion - but it was rivets that sunk the Titanic, so now they say.... but to be "confident in the rivets" - I really like that, seems very sexy to me, very male in a positive way.

    Nice one.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    October 28, 2007

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    I was going to say this seems familiar, but then got to authors notes and it all added up

    You have improved on it very well

    I love taking an older poem and growing it into more
    SO excellent


    • Windhover silver member
      October 29, 2007
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      Thanks so much for putting up with me twice! Yes, I don't often re-write or edit too much, but I usually like the results when I do. Thank you again. >W<