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Dust Kisses.

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Her cracked, parched lips

Scraped the back of my hand –

Each wheezing breath blew

Fresh flurries of sand-blast halitosis,

Worrying the welts etched

Into my sallow, grey skin

Causing inconsolable irritation.

But I ignored and endured;

Much as I have learned to coexist

With the itch incessant curdling my

Festering loins for these

Pasteurized years.

I allowed dust kisses to float

Down like snowflakes

To coat the meandering blue

Of my veins with a sheen

Reminiscent of vapour.

She lingered in the cleft

Betwixt my knuckles

And I half-expected her to gnaw

On their cartilage with her

Whittled gums; rubbery, toothless

And ravaged with plaque.

I would not have cared

If she did –

I would have let

Her suck saline sweat

From my dilating pores all day

If she so desired.

But she paused, seemed

To change her mind

And slowly with creaking jaw

She withdrew

Her blessing.

O My Carnation!

Whence did thou decant thy crimson?

Which foul ogre bled thee white?

 

Expressionless,

As an immutable sphinx I

Waited until she had turned away.

Whereupon I flung my calloused hand up to

Malnourished maw ravenously licking

At every phantom mote left behind

By dust kisses and I swear by all gods

Dead or forgotten, they still held

hertastehertastehertastehertastehertastehertastehertastehertasteher

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Done. Spent. Gutless. Bloodless.
I no longer have the stomach for this, said the decanted head and nodded off to sleep in solitude`s embrace beneath a quilt of dust.

Do I taste her?

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  • mr backwards
    September 3

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    I'm not sure where I heard it from, but a psychology perspective on necrophilia is that it is polar to sexual attraction. That is, sexual drives come from a will to reproduce with another temporary being, and 'death-lust' is just that; our conflicting drive for entropy and loss.
    We are drawn to it because it is the opposite; therefore it is the same...
    so if you were to make a chart from necrophilia to nymphomania, asexuality/sterility/homosexuality would be in the center.

    does that make sense?

    anyway, this is great. beautiful imagery, symbolism, diction, everything. Vile and disgusting. I love it.


    • gnosisonG silver member
      September 9
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      Embracing Thanatos

      Or cuddling with death-angst. Heheh - interesting take on what I assumed was merely the withering and dissipation of a lifes love Mr B.
      But if the dust still retains a taste, even one mainly mnemonic, then a residue of love must remain.
      I think maybe when we are obsessed by our drives abject objectifying such as necrophilia is barely a bones throw away.
      Thanx for a nicely lewd rude and skewed perspective Mr sdrawkcab!

      As always undying regards

      gGraverobber


  • pwnd ur azz
    September 1
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    wow. this is a pretty good poem on that topic. you did a great job on this piece. the speaker aounds sorrowful in the loss of love and years. i lov the raw emotion in it. my favorite part was the last stanza.

    there were so many dry phrases! i am thirsty just from reading it, as i devoured each and every moistureless line. great job!


    • gnosisonG silver member
      September 2
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      Reading poetry can be thirsty work!

      I suppose that was an example of "dry wit" BrutalRomance. Heheh.
      I shall return the gracious favour your comments have deigned to rain down upon my poor work with a (hopefully) constructive critique of one of your own poems soon as I can.
      Cheers.

      gG

  • lesoriginale
    August 14

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    almost perfect. Rich

    An extremely rich poem doused in rich poetic finery, sublime. Subject was seductive and tintillating, like a secret. Extremely beautiful, like a glorious feast. Well done.

    . Rewarded 4


    • gnosisonG silver member
      August 17
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      Cheers lesoriginale!

      Most gracious praise. Much appreciated.

      gG


  • fallenleaf
    February 26

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    deeeep

    This is such deep stuff...It is a wonderful poem.My stomach churned inside when I read it.Its a very powerful poem gG!
    good work!

    . Rewarded 4


    • gnosisonG silver member
      September 2
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      Hi fallenleaf!

      Sorry for being so discourteous as to reply so tardily - but thanx alot mate. Your opinion is always much appreciated - hope all is well.

      Warm regards

      gG


  • riveralex gold member
    January 3

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    heart-rending...

    and almost unbearable, for those of us who like it all so very nice and neat. All the power of the desert. Well done

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      January 3
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      Cheers Riveralex!

      Yeah. DK took a lot out of me. It was written and posted the same morning (unlike me) without scalpellic rewrites to attain a loftier reverie. Feeling rejected and such. Indeed depression and bipolar fluctuations are disheartenly acute in providing grist for the mill, as it were.
      Happy New Annum by the way, and I owe you a couple of comments!

      Regards

      gG

  • Terry-too
    December 6, 2007

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    Yup, in its memory

    From the perspective of one who is at least one full generation older than everyone reading this, the threat of old age is immensely overestimated. "It is always ten years older than I am" --and according to this poem, at least thirty! With people dropping like flies in a -cide blast around me, I would not want to be even ten years younger! Hey, my pension pays me for just breathing!

    But this poem seemed like reluctant acceptance of a future with the inevitabilities and changes of life. It is a topic that too seldom is aired to let out the mustiness of what we assume still must be--or indeed sometimes already is.

    With this description, if accepted as an immediate future, it is enough to add the burden of untold years to the age of readers! The burden, not the years. So far beyond what I had known in my first hundred years that really I don't expect ever to go there at all!

    (This year alone has already added more than three or four to my total--it has been rough.) I'm glad I cannot expect to live so long. But that does not prevent immense sympathy for multitudes for whom this is stark reality already.
    You have done them a great service.

    At the bottom it suggests: "Any other ideas about how the poem could improve?" No, because to dilute it with "this is probably the worst it can be" anywhere along its length, would lessen its formidable impact. Powerful, powerful poem of loss!

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  • Lad silver member
    November 26, 2007

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    Wow, what a searing, desperate, panting, aging ghost is vaporing through this one, gG. I hear the plea of a guy finally admitting getting not only older, but swiftly slipping away from all things erotic - and, man, how they're missed.

    It's all fine, but that final stanza, a poem in itself, is tops - I hear a Shakespearean stage direction from Macbeth: "Exit Ghost", exit dust, wrinkles, aching and yearning from all the delights of what used to be. Oh well, there's always TV...

    Helluva rich one, my friend. And yet, yet: there are some women out there, some rich, probably in Venice, who'd love hanging around an aging, tremulous, romantic poet who'd savor hertastehertastehertaste...and pay for everything too.

    Lad

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      December 4, 2007
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      Ah yes,

      the toy-boy days of yore, how I miss thee. Thesedays all my matrons reside in my head where there is limited scope for taste.
      Cheers Lad for a fine suggestion.

      gGigolo


  • Iorek
    November 25, 2007

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    Oh, what can i say? You had me hooked from the opening. Taking that picture, and then the wonderful crackling consonants of "Her cracked, parched lips" I was just sitting there thinking "yes yes yes!" hehe. Then the third line, talking about breath, is all open vowes. "Clever bugger" I thought.

    I love this melding of good old fashioned heat of passion rising in the skin, mixing in with the burning heat and dust of the desert. The impression These tidbit kisses, and breaths, no matter how disgustingly they are in fact portrayed, are very much desired and longed for, and the narrator is longing for much more, and so these small samples of affection burn and irritate him, they stoke the fire, but give it no release, nowhere to escape, other than to, so to speak, burn out through his skin.

    "O My Carnation!
    Whence did thou decant thy crimson?
    Which foul ogre bled thee white? "
    I was getting very strong Eliot, prufrock period feelings here, but that might just be me. It's a wonderful set of lines anyways. I could pullout s many bits of this poem, althoug it does feel largely quite odd because I'd have to be going "oh that image is tremendously horrific, this bit is wonderfully repellent too..." lol

    The desperation of the final stanza is just so superbly communicated. I don't know how personallt satisfied you are with this poem, but if you *were* planning t revise it, don't you dare toucht he final stanza. I.... I could try and analyze it, and it would be very fun, but it would double the length of this critique and I wouldn't be telling you anything you didn't already know. The narrators desperate eagerness to taste, but also his awkwardness in not wanting her to know how desperate he is, the image, and then of course the absolute stunner of a final line. Bravo


    • gnosisonG silver member
      December 6, 2007
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      Iorek Thy Keen Eye...

      ...offers immense recompense for efforts of my whittled quill! Thank you so much for noting how important the sounds expressed through interplay of vowel and consonant, soft and sharp, are in imparting emotive sensibilities.
      "they stoke the fire, but give it no release, nowhere to escape, other than to, so to speak, burn out through his skin."
      Exactly. Passion is steam - a vaporous heat-wave rising from a molten core. The juxtaposition to quell/suffocate/dampen this conceptual evocation is descriptive aridity - dryness, desert and dust (an immutable Sphinx hopefully enhances this).
      The carnation "decanted" from red to white symbolizing the loss of "moisture" of red-blooded carnality.
      The depiction of decreptitude is more based on decline of love than actual age.
      The Kisser might well be considered Venus or the ideal of Love as well as a figment of flesh and bone.
      The ache and longing behind a stoic, embittered mask of indifference (sandblasted like the Sphinx), represents the emotive juxtaposition. Though this poured from the Akashic library all in one go and was actually posted here the same day I think I was lucky enough in my endeavours to avoid too extensive revision so I will let this sleeping dog lie, pockmarks and all.

      With gimlet eye and beady gaze I am a vulture scouring the veldt for another fresh cadaver of despair and desparation in which to plunge balding quill within steaming pile of intestine to wrench free further gobbets, chewing chagrin in toothless beak until spontaneous expectoration of poetic effluence occurs. Only then does insight reveal the corpse of contention...

      to be my own.

      Cheers Iorek! I owe you, mate.

      gGuts and gGristle


      • Terry-too
        December 6, 2007
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        gG "depiction of decreptitude..."

        Um, yes?
        I guess now I read it too?
        Shudder!


  • Kiddy
    November 25, 2007

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    An Echoing sorrow...

    Love never fails or dies, but lovers do. The tone is what makes me sad. This deep lamentation is something painful.. a kinda hurt, I could feel.
    The last part of the poem appeals to me a lot. Expressionless, long wait in vain - speaks about the deep sorrow of the speaker. I could rather call it pain of separation - it can’t be mere 'sorrow, I know. Starvation of love is powerfully portrayed in here. You have done a wonderful job, Simon… I always love to read your poems, this is one of your best.
    Love
    -Kiddy

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      December 6, 2007

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      Starvation of Love

      is a good way of putting it, Ms Kiddy. This was one of my hastiest writes being posted here at Scarepo the same day it was wrenched kicking and screaming from the well of despair (hmm - nice ring to that phrase).
      Thank you so much for your response Kiddy. Take care and good luck with marital plans!
      gG


  • iphios silver member
    November 24, 2007

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    Dust is easily blown and lingers only for sometime; come wind and its all gone.
    This is Spent. There is nothing left hanging on to. This almost felt too painful to read. Its a miserable state of being. To continue to allow your wounds to continue to hurt leaves us numb; a sadder state than being in pain.
    This poem shouted an emptiness,exhaustion, exasperation that has reached a point that anyone is such a bind should just runaway from. Sleep, gG, i think isn't sufficient escape from this almost robotic existence. It pain and more pain. Emptiness and more emptiness. I don't know for sure if this is the picture you were conveying gG. But it felt that way. Do please clarify and correct me if i'm too far away from the poet's intentions.

    -iphios

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      December 6, 2007
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      Painfully Close to the Mark Iphios!

      Every so/all too often I stumble in my endeavours to attain a modicum of civility and provide prompt replies to the stimulating thoughts and comments offered by my worthy peers.
      As is the case with your comment here, dear Iphios, aspects required some digestion before submitting a reply.
      Your astute analysis reveals and exposes the despair I felt upon transcribing Dust Kisses, clothing raw emotion in wordage.
      But you so hit the nail on the cerebellum with your sentence:
      "To continue to allow your wounds to continue to hurt leaves us numb; a sadder state than being in pain."
      Quite took my breath away, undressing my hype of cant and underlining the real tragedy of the oh-so-human affair herein depicted. Unfortunately there are some things for a variety of reasons, exceedingly difficult to "runaway" from and though I am fortunate enough to possess moderate talent in filling my emptiness with "Words (that) clothe a poets naked soul" there is little respite and even less rest for as you are of course aware, though robots may switch themselves off, they never sleep.

      Top marks and heartiest salutations

      gGrinand"bare"it


      • iphios silver member
        December 6, 2007
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        Thank you gG for taking the time to reply to my comment and for 'digesting' it. Being able to 'almost' hit the mark is enough, for then i was able to see through the poem what must be seen. I do understand the idea that some things are not hard to runaway from, for like you i face a reality difficult to ran from. And so our words are our only means to fill the emptiness. Words are cathartic.
        I've realized that much of your poetry has that 'real tragedy' beneath it and this humble reader tries to see it.

        take care.

        -iphios


  • ladydwarf silver member
    November 24, 2007

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    Yeah I am also done, spent gutless after that piece so early on a Saturday morning. needed more coffee for all of that......quite a gift with the macabra you have! Very well done though.I once did a verse that I tried to make as dark as I could ("Missed Abortion" so since you said the poem was about Venus I am thinking that you are expressing that you are unwilling to let go of your dream for true love..............no matter how hopeless or futile it seems.......hmmmmm good point well done. Might have to write a rebuttal for that...............will let you know.......huggers!

    . Rewarded 8


    • gnosisonG silver member
      November 26, 2007
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      Coffee a cure for an intense perusal spent, eh?

      Though too much always gives me the jitters anyway. Thank you so much for relaying your gut reaction upon reading D K, Ladydwarf. Thats the best type of compliment a sometime mendicant of visceral verse could receive. Quite right on your interp, looking forward to a rebuttal, heheh. And Missed Abortion sounds like a foetid foetus gone amiss for sure!
      By the way I did in one write sate my own (poetic)"urges" for tales of Gothic prematurae in the fourth installment of my vamp series Irma Vep so no Fallopian escapades planned from this quill for mo. But then again what is ever "planned" when downloading Calliope from the Akashic Library? Dust Kisses blew in off the cuff serving scant scalpels of revision before lip-servicing ScarePoetry the same day. Funny how its often easiest to scrawl the hardest of things to write.

      Warmest regards

      gG


  • Ludmila607
    November 24, 2007

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    Suffering lead to humanity

    it seems that suffering is a good teacher when humans forget whats the meaning of being all part of the same nature.all neccessary and needed.Those cruel images impacts on my heart so strongly.When will empowered ones learn about compassion?
    Stop war!
    Stop occupations!
    Stop intervention on internal issuess!
    Stop cultural imposition!
    Everyone have the right to live theyr own history and destiny.
    Stop suffering...learn about compassion.
    Venus simbolize love.
    This is my emotional response to your poem.

    . Rewarded 8


    • gnosisonG silver member
      November 26, 2007
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      Hi Ludmila!

      Thank you for your as ever interesting comment. How right you are - Alas, suffering is indeed a most proficient teacher and how sad it is that empowerment seldom equates with empathy. Thanx again for your thoughts. I will check your latest work very soon, Ludmila.
      Cheers
      gG


  • Classical Midnight
    November 23, 2007
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    interesting

    this poem made me feel like i was holding this old lady. the metaphors you give really explain the situation. my favorite line is "I would have let
    Her suck saline sweat From my dilating pores all day".


    • gnosisonG silver member
      November 23, 2007
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      Cheers

      The old dame is Venus by the way.

      regards
      gG

  • dave ochs silver member
    November 22, 2007

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    hey gG

    hope i get this right-your on some kind of mission to bring food to a third world country and you encounter a straving child. dust kisses is a strong theme. and the last line was a fitting device.
    dave

    . Rewarded 4


    • gnosisonG silver member
      November 23, 2007
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      Nope

      The accompanying image might be lending less than a helping hand to grasp thisun, Dave. This follows more the downward spiralling arc of a personal relationship where two people starved of love can no longer communicate affection. The narrator (being a whiny git!) also bewails his enforced yet chosen suppression of lust and desire and the last passage displays just how pathetically weak his hold on these fundamentals really is.
      More monkey than monk as are all us imperfects.

      gG

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