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Sunflower Girl (Final Draft)


Before dark you’ll decline,
your brown eyes dropping
in cicada refrain,
in the peachy light of evening.

For me your best perfume,
as the hidden legs of crickets creak,
honeysuckle, cornhusks whisper June
running by in bare feet.

This is how I mark my days,
even in quiet crystalline winter,
your radiant rays
melting through my slumber

raising your sun-burned face
singing wind chimes and airplane drone
dandelion fluff and Queen Anne’s Lace
of love and things yet undone.

For Kristi and Madison

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Reviews


  • Windhover silver member
    January 6

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    Romantic

    It flows, it's atmospheric, the rhyme is silky and unobtrusive, the words are beautifully chosen and romantic. Kristi and Madison should be pleased.


    • billbrando gold member
      January 6
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      Thanks John

      Kristi and Madison are my wife and daughter; and both love to be outside on our farm in the summer.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    January 7

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    Gosh this took me back to my childhood, when I live in a quiet country town, you could hear the birds,cicadas and roo's jumping through the bush. You could smell the flowers or even the rain right before it came. Going for a swim in the river and the rapids.
    They are my fondest memories and this poem bought them all back again

    I was cheeky and read the comments to, but am glad as now I know who kristi and madison are

    The rhyming in this is tight and none feels forced.

    I dont remember reading an earlier version of this but it doesn't matter, this was perfect inspiring and uplifting read

    Cindy

    . Rewarded 8


    • billbrando gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you

      We don't have kangaroos here in Ohio, unless at the zoo, but I'm glad my little poem was able to awaken such good memories for you!