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Sekhmet Dissects Us.

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”He from before me moved and made me stop,
 Saying: "Behold Dis, and behold the place
Where thou with fortitude must arm thyself."


How frozen I became and powerless then,
Ask it not, Reader, for I write it not,
Because all language would be insufficient.


I did not die, and I alive remained not;
Think for thyself now, hast thou aught of wit,
What I became, being of both deprived. ”


The Divine Comedy – Inferno XXXIV, Dante.


Dis,
Appear up here we peer at her
Purr with her then blur with her
Distinctive curvature she seeps
From pores of furry paws pause
To catch a breathless kiss or hiss
Of death and flex her evil claws
Glazed our gaze scales her canine
Scythes impailing us like gutterflies
Shrouds and shrouds of utter lies
Fluttering fist to shut up cries of
Dis,
Pair a pair were meant to share
All the nightmare stink they bear
Compare a memory of her tremours
Every loving link our madness severs
Never rediscovered convinced the other
We do recover before descending
Credits sweep our happy ending
Down the Empty Whole
Wired World swallow our void!
Shoddy and soiled boiled in pith
Of mortal myth trampled over
Carnal hordes of charnal whores
Stampede the skittish carnivores
And instinct crushes
All our gushing rush of self
Dis,
Gust of rank cares in foul lairs
Fowl airs in skies of eyes despise
Our depression upon the earth
The crater the pit the death
Of rebirth
The dearth.
Abandon pride we lessen the mess
Confess our sins to the Lioness
Anoint us with the Flood she
Who blesses us with blood
As we sink into the mud of
Dis,
Illusion meant
Nothing.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Sekhmet is the Egyptian Lioness Goddess who would have slaughtered humanity but for being tricked into quaffing copious jugs of strong beer disguised as blood. Dis is another name for Pluto/Hades who kidnapped Persephone from the daylight world and drew her down into Below. This recital-slanted scrawl replaces the Muse of Spring with Sekhmet and attempts to portray an impression of grabbing a tiger by the tail. Oh yeah and its personal allegory of course... Sorry (waitnoifuckingaint!).
Anyway I will try it in a live open mic tomorrow. Break a neck...I mean leg.

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  • Lad silver member
    April 11

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    How I missed this fun one, Simon, I don't know, but I'm glad I dug around in your underworld and found it. Delightful...feeling a bit under the late-winter weather, as I do? Good, because this Sicilian cassattacake came out of your doldrums. And I'm sure the reading went well, from puzzlement to WOW!

    It's a fun trip down Dis's lane, dragging poor Per down to his lair, as all patriarchal machomen have done since probably the second millenium, BCE: can't have the ladies fertilize and rule the earth with their free spirits!

    Loved the researched background to this - a Dis-ciplined, civilized, metered, rhymed, probing poem - and whatever has happened to THAT genre these days of romantic first-draft gushings of self-proclaimed genius? Really good to have you around here to remind us all of the magic of masterfully done poetry whose hard labor never shows under its fine style.

    And yes, "Illusion meant nothing" and still doesn't. So why in the world doesn't that Lioness dis-sect us all already? What a mess we "gutterflies" have made, along with our petulant gods. Why not just "sweep our happy ending / down the Empty Whole / Wired World" and be done with it? Well, because gG keeps writing jeweled-netted poems such as this. Lots of fun here. Loved its labyrinthne ways to downunder!

    Cheers...

    Lad

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  • celestialpie gold member
    March 8

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    A marriage of hell and . . . er, hell-o kitty? I've read this one at least five times, Simon, and I find, as with so many of yours, the labyrinth is the most fitting myth for you, and I stand at the entrance of it, an awed, whimpering and unsuspecting sacrifice. Fortunately, Apis-sites attract.

    Am very amused with Hades/Dis getting saddled with a real wild cat-- I always hated the Persephone myth, with the girl being shuttled between the original dirty old man and mum. I love your re-imagining her with claws and scythe-like canines. Now they are well and truly matched!

    My favorite line, bar-none, is "Confess our sins to the Lioness." That might be a confession this ex-Catholic could consent to-- and what's more, an act of contrition I might actually stick to! (waitnoifuckingwouldn't!)

    This might be your mightiest tapestry, bold and complex, full of forbidding figures and tasty brain-treats. As everyone else has mentioned, I love the rhymes, the multitude of puns and entendres. I feel very proud of myself for catching all your "Dis" puns-- Disappear, Despair, Disgust, Disillusionment.

    You're our Master of Dis gGuise. Thank you for the always delightful challenge. I may reach Theseus-levels of cleverness yet.

    Lauren

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      March 11
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      Dis Turbed

      Hi Pie. Yeah there was always something rather unrealistic about the Persephone myth. The Greeks were total misogynists and the myth is in my opinion a corruption of pre-bronze/iron age tales utilsed as propaganda to denigrate earth Goddess religions in favour of the new violent sky-gods such as Marduk, Zeus, Sol Invictus etc.
      Not many girls I know would go along with the type of kidnapping/rape depicted here, either as Mother Demeter or Persephone!
      They would make Hades life Hell for sure! Heheh.
      This myth is probably a corruption of Inanna´s Descent to the Underworld, where the intrepid lady attempts to wrest her dead beau, Dummuzi, from bad sis - Ereshkigal. In this far more powerful, evocative and older Summerian version, even the baddie is a chick, so the patriarch warlords could never let that by - whether they be iron age king or pernicious pope. The world went wrong at the end of the neolithic. This travesty of human development was compounded by the rise of monotheism - judaism, christianity and islam - and we´re still paying the price. Spiritual disfranchisement. Disgraceful.
      (Apis-sites - good one)
      Cheers Lauren!

      gGoddess gGroupie

  • Terry-too
    March 2

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    Hi Simon,

    Thank you for this! I have a copy of "The Inferno of Dante" here (both in the original Italian and in a "verse translation" by Robert Pinsky) and thank you for locating your source in XXXIV. My version is published in 1994 by HarperCollinsCanadaLtd and copyrighted to the nth degree.

    In Italian, in the page facing what you had, I located:

    "Ecco Dite", dicendo, sed ecco il loco
    ove convien che di fortezza t'armi."
    Com' io divenni alloe gelato e fioco,
    nol demandar, lettor, ch'i' non lo scrivo
    pero ch'ogne parlar sarebbe poco.
    Io non mori' e non remasi vivo;
    pensa oggimai per te, s'hai fior d'ingegno,
    qual iodivenni, d'uno e d'altro privo.

    While in 3rd year high school Spanish, the teacher provided an after-hours Italian class. Never did I guess in 1947-8 that it would prove its worth today!
    (That's more than a couple of years!)

    I have been making my way through the cantos, thanks to the excellent English translation on pages facing the Italian. Remembering copyright--call this a review: we get:

    He made me stop, and moved from in front of me.
    "Look, here is Dis, " he said, "and here is the place
    where you must arm yourself with the quality

    Of fortitude." How chilled and faint I was
    On hearing that, you must not ask me, reader--
    I do not write it; words would not suffice;

    I neither died, nor kept alive--consider
    With your own wits what I, alike denuded
    of death and life, became as I heard my leader.

    The original copyright 1994 is by Farrar, Straus and Giroux (paperback)

    There is a page of info I can send you if you were inclined to purchase this version--or to ask a local library to get it-- just ask!

    About yours, I intend to read it many times to enjoy the richness of internal rhyme and pun here in such generous degree. Once is not nearly enough! That it plugged into existing interest was a bonus.

    I cannot begin to do justice to what you have written!
    It has the effortless flow of "stream-of-consciousness" writing whether that was its method or not. Suffice to say that I am fully aware of the poetic feast, and have put it into my list of favourites.

    Must go--supper calls, saying it's going cold.

    Terry

    PS, Oh but the eye-sttrain! I have to hilight to read it--dark text would have been easier!


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    • gnosisonG silver member
      March 11
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      Hi Terry!

      Thanx for another great comment. Isn´t it amazing how much may differ in various translations! Not just words and their sequence but entire passages can alter meaning!
      I found my translation somewhere on the web so I doubt if it is as weighty and scholarly precise as the one you have.
      It did write itself as a stream of consciousness and I was fortunate that it required relatively limited revision. Thanx for spotting that but you are as usual unusually astute!
      And I apologise for the red-ink Terry!
      Red seems to be a bit of trade-mark with me at the moment I´m afraid.
      I`ll try and remember to dress my next one in black - just for you.
      It was fun trying to read the Italian verse out loud to myself!
      Cheers Terry!

      Highest regards

      gG


  • Windhover silver member
    February 14
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    Dense

    Vintage you gG with far too much packed in for us mere mortals to process. Wonderful rhyme and flow, strongly laced with pun and double entendre. Even the most uneducated and dense can get something from it. It lends itself to enthusiastic performance which somehow, I believe, you will manage. Break a mic.. >W<


    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 15
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      Cheers W.

      Condensed mythology with emphasis on dense I suppose this is. But I m glad you say there is still something to be gleaned from this. Personally I don´t believe it neccesary to comprehend everything one reads. The best stuff in this vein would fester in the mind and linger until a dawning of meaning occurs.
      Pretentious bollox is still bollox of course and some (perhaps many!) will view this as such but...so what. I don´t write for others. I write for myself about things that interest, frustrate, perplex and confuse me (though not neccesarily in that order).
      The reading went ok last night. I m in the UK right now to finish off the Veps and pick up some inspiration before I return to my northern exile next week. I should ve learnt it off by heart though since referal to a piece of paper can inhibit the performance. Next time. Thanx for your support John.
      Regards
      gG

  • LeftTurnsOnly
    February 14

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    Wow

    Amazing, I really respect what seems like alot of research or a deep knowledge of the subject you write about here. I had to do a little researching myself to try and get a back story, but most of them were pretty construed by the authors themselves. Most of it went right over my head, very layered. But I am very interested in ancient history so this one was definately something I enjoyed very much. Hopefully soon I'll be starting to put together a piece I've been researching about the Romans and greeks, not sure which yet, but probably the Greek Gods and how they shaped the society, something like that. So I was very happy to see something like this out there and written so well. I hope you don't mind my ramblings...

    TTYL
    MM

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 15
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      Cheers LeftTurnsOnly

      Thanx for your kind comment (by no means rambling). Yeah I´d go with the Greeks since nearly all the Roman gods are mere versions of the Greek pantheon. The background myth for this is basically as follows.
      Horny Hades,King of the Underworld (he mustn t be compared to christianity´s cartoon Satan figure by the way) couldn`t find a girl to share his gloomy realm with so he kidnaps beautiful Persephone. But her Mum the Goddess Demeter was mightily peeved and seals the earth in a permanent grip of Winter. A compromise is however reached and Persephone was allowed half a year on the surface thus heralding the advent of Spring.
      Regards

      gG

  • dave ochs silver member
    February 13

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    gG

    I'm sorry but this one went over my head, even after several readings. i did read it out loud and it sounded great, ahd had a great flow but the meaning was above the grasp of my meager intellect.
    dave

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    • gnosisonG silver member
      February 14
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      Cheers Dave

      Yeah. Immediate clarity obviously wasn´t forthcoming when I wrote this. It s a layer-cake of desperate impressions. On one level the voice is that of Dis/Pluto/Hades describing Persephone (his bride or victim - however you view the myth) as that of a far more vicious, brutal, dangerous female incarnation than the Goddess of Spring is and therefore becomes Sekhmet the Lioness who tops the bill in nastiness.
      The type of girl you might put on a pedastal but would then eat you alive - playing with fire etc.
      At another level its the piping squeak of a bloke complaining about severe depression/sinking into hell/Hades/Dis and dispondently whining about failed love - which is I suppose a fitting upturned finger to Valentines Day. I could do a deeper analysis, Dave, but thats enough flighty bollox for one day eh?
      Cheers
      gG

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