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threads

amid the chaotic threads entangled in perception
sewed on a familiar ground
demanding a further construction
wounding all the colored visions

splattered extremity on the whole notion
left are the colored marks by those threads
creating an illusionary disposition

a singular treasured ground

Screaming and scratching sounds are heard
Shouting a change
within a convoluted shell in hand
still holding on to it looking for something inside

another rosy vision has gone off its age
Moral or another misleading idealization
colored into sepia

Is it the exigency of a demanded change?
Demanding a creation of a new ground
or ripping off the sepia visions
Losing out to their very scheme of initiation

with an underlying conviction
to base each of those scales
wearing the dark strokes

reassuring and enlightening
the beige tones on the shell

In the tread to find a newer supposition
another strong notion to help that very alteration
still
all remains
sticking to the older realms.







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  • William McGarvey silver member
    March 19

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    Terrific!

    Hey Khushboo!

    Your poetry has really flourished over the years. I really like this one. It flows very well and I can feel a struggle within you as you are writing this one. An authors note would be very helpful with a poem like this one so the reader could get a glimps into the soul of the author as she is writing this gem.

    Bill

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    • deep inside
      March 19
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      thanks Bill,

      I am glad you liked it.Yeah, you have been with me since the time I started writing.I really appreciate your support.
      Bill, frankly this just flowed out of me and to actually look back and write more might be hard.I'll still try writing something for the support of the poem.
      Thanks a lot for writing in.

      khushboo

  • Sufjan
    August 6
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    at a loss

    I think this piece is very confused. The proliferation of words ending with "tion" doesn't help in clarifying what the writer wants to say. The metaphors don't match up. There is hardly any focus to hold the reader's attention. What is it really that you are trying to say here? Perhaps I am just a very bad reader. I hope you don't mind my directness.

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