Jewess Chewed And Spat. by gnosisonG at Share Poetry

Night Mary´s waking dream

Dreams of shining wire.

Livid coils enclasp her

Wordless world with

Sightless sound,

Subcutaneous hum

Unfolding in her heart.

Fat-lipped with chubby smiles

Wardens grin inimical at

Womanherds´ despoilment

Seeding deep destruction,

Trepanning

With surgical derision,

Skullfucks so scathing;

A scarlet web of scars –

Criss-crossing squint, imperfect

Orbs are twinklings pooled

Within an invisible stare.

Good Night Mary sweats an ebb,

Weeping life from rash of saws

Until her psyche elopes

Along pitfalls pathed

With crazy paving; she

Abandons her abyss,

Bulbous with darkness,

Pregnant with cavity –

A breath of deserted Darfur,

A spreading Sbrenican stain,

A Chechen widow´s future ghost

Of a Jewess chewed and spat.

Author notes

Dedicated to the women and children of Concentration Camp Gaza aswell as a general genuflection to the stoicism displayed by all women victimised by male wars.

Psyops or rape?

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Brian Balzer
September 22
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I need a dictionary!
I'm afraid without there's not much I can say. I can tell this is a sad tale about an atrosity, but it's hard for me to grasp.
- gnosisonG
  September 23
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  Hi Bri!
  A dictionary, thesaurus and even a rhyming dictionary can be exceptional tools for poetry writing (or for reading my gobbledygook).
  There s some good comments below which might serve to elucidate further.
  Cheers
  
  gG
celestialpie
April 27

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Hi, Simon. Woe to any villain who gets in your poetic crosshairs. You fire with sharpshooter vision and precision one shot, one kill at the atrocities committed, as they have been time and again, where women always seem to suffer the most. I like the dual use of "Night Mary,"-- a pun, as well in the west being the ultimate mother's name. It was especially poignant given, "pregnant with cavity."

I was also struck by the lines,

"Trepanning
With surgical derision,
Skullfucks so scathing . . ." Skullfucks, indeed! Trepanning is not something typically encountered in poetry-- I am always impressed with the way you include, to great effect, obscure items into your poetry.

Cheers,
Lauren

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- gnosisonG
  April 28
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  Cheers Celestial.
  I think, subliminally, I must´ve been aching to use trepanning somewhere, risking historicity in place of a more accessible "lobotomy" - "skullfucks" followed logically adding to the allitteration soundiness.
  I am a firm believer in letting things obscure endure.
  Thanx for noting Mary the Mother - also Mary = La mer = the sea, a symbol of human unconsciousness which I (amateurishly) attempt to emulate somewhat, stylewise.
  
  Cheers a bundle
  
  gGrrrlpower
Gagiikwe
April 24

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Gratuitous, inflamatory rhetoric.
Gratuitous profanities aside, this is a very creative work, that functions with great emotional intensity.

I have read thru this several times since it was first published; and have deliberately not commented until now. However, rather than sensitising me, or persuading me to your point(s)of view, I found the rhetoric equally as biased and inflamatory as those you wrote against. That only seems to perpetuates the behaviours that you so disdain.

Take it from someone who has worked with refugees for several decades: Yes, you do live in a protected country.
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- gnosisonG
  April 28
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  May I Express My Gratuitude...
  for your honest comment, Gagiikwe, aswell as the compliments you kindly render.
  By profanitIES do you mean "skullfucks" or is there more than the one? The profanity for me lies with the subject material and as such JCAS is an attempt to express this.
  If the rhetoric is biased in favour of women gang-raped by combatants then so be it - I see no reason for a balanced view of such behavior and evincing disgust for such is not something I would usually equate with perpetuating oppression and willful subjugation of a civilian population!
  Rather gratuitously implied, I thought.
  As is the implication that I (as you yourself do) live in a protected country and therefore know nothing of the true suffering of refugees.
  Debatable to which degree of understanding perhaps, but take it from someone who has friends, social aquaintences and colleagues (and whose wife is a contact for Chechen refugees) who are, or at one point have been, refugees from Palestine, Iraq, Vietnam, Chile, Somalia, Sudan and Chechnya, that if one requires sensitizing to these issues, then indeed, one poem will certainly NOT suffice.
  But of course I am not saying you are insensitive to this suffering, mate, quite the opposite and may I finish by commending you for working with refugees for as long as you have.
  
  Cheers
  
  gG
mojojames
March 17

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Horror follows horror...
Aside from the excellence, poignance and appropriateness of the language with the plays on words, and the colliding, percussive syllables that add to the horror there is something very disturbing beyond the apt description, there is the echo of the Holocaust here and how it still reverberates and is enacted on differing scales almost everywhere in the world today. As if horror when it fades makes room for new horrors. I commend you for taking on this difficult subject. MJ
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- gnosisonG
  March 17
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  Cheers Mojojames.
  Interesting, if ghastly thought, that horror fades only to be replaced in similar vein somewhere else, as though there were a required quotient of pain applied to numb our collective psyches. Who or what would benefit from that I wonder?
  The armaments industry and world banking/ financing certainly.
  Maybe David Icke is right.
  Thanx for the kind words on the language, MJ, ghostly echoes are all around if one listens.
  
  Warmest regards
  
  gG
Mark McNulty
March 11

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Very stirring...
Thank you for sharing this pointed, powerful, and important piece. As time marches forward, it is voices such as these that I fear will go silent and unforgotten. You not only give audience to the voices in this poem, but you add palpable emotion and true human feeling, as well. A touching piece that certainly deserves to be celebrated to the important thought and reflection it inspires.
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- gnosisonG
  March 12
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  Very Kind
  of you to comment so positively, Mr McNulty. Your words are wholly warming. I ve been perusing and enjoying your work for a while - about time I render comment.
  Thanx again
  
  gG
iphios
March 11

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For some reason this poem resonated through me and has become an instant favorite. The tone and word choice has tugged my heart unexpectedly. War, wherever we look at it, will leave great damage. There is no victor in this situation. Though we may suppress the enemy, we leave many wounded. For in a far, the fault of a group affects a nation. And in this case, the women and the children. Often i find they become truly cattle for war.
Incredible write as always. The wordplay: Night Mary's, womanherd, and the mention of Darfur...the last three...brought back pictures...painful and heart wrenching.
I trust that society is learning to peer through this situation beyond just who started the war or who is wrong. It is sad that we see nations imposing themselves in other nations and creating war...to stop the 'abusive governments' and hurt its people.
The troubling thing about war, that after a nation/people has been hit by it, the witnessing generation shall never be the same. They are permanently altered. And what of this women and children?
May this world find its peace and its rightful justice (not the imposed, conveniently defined form).

-iphios
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- gnosisonG
  March 13
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  Cheers Iphios.
  Great comment. Yeah, talking about permanently altered, I wonder how many suicide bombers are being created in Gaza by the heinous policies of Israel backed to such amoral degree by the USA.
  China is (justifiably) receiving flak for their backing of fascist islamic Sudan and SLORC generals in Burma etc. But what incredible hypocrites the USA (and their weasily EU tag-alongs) present themselves as being by allowing zionist madness to continue unabated in "Eretz Israel" and the conquered territories of Palestine.
  Mass rapes and massacres in Chechnya incited, condoned and encouraged by the bloody war-criminal Putin... The list goes on and on and at the end of the day, its all about one thing:
  The Money.
  The so-called civilized world is led by a bevy of warmongering, weapon-dealing, morally worthless old-men.
  We all are responsible for buying into their lies and perpetuating their crass exploitation. At the end of the day we are fuck-ups in a fucked-up world and as a privileged white male in Norway I´m sitting on top of the whole broken, bleeding pile, wanking away in my teetering ivory tower.
  But this is the last gasp of La Belle Epoch and the Guns of August are being primed on the horizon.
  Shame about the kids.
  
  gG
himanshumodi
March 11
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Psyops... or Rape... Equally depressing, vulgar and villainous. You drive home the point with poetic brilliance, arousing anger and guilt in the reader.

Highly Moved.
HM
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- gnosisonG
  March 11
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  Cheers Himanshumodi!
  Thanx a lot, mate. I´ll get back to you soon.
  
  gG
CinfullyDelicious
March 9
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Such strong wording..deep imagery within your depths you took this too

a captivating write
flowing well and I just lost myself in the story.
A gift to take such a thing and write this to me

Well done

Cindy
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- gnosisonG
  March 10
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  Thanx Cindy.
  For your kind comment.
  "..write this to me.." forgive me if I misunderstood but are you speaking as a woman in general who empathizes with the fate of so many unfortunate women, or as someone who in some way has experienced male-victimisation personally.
  If so I don´t mean to pry and please don´t feel obligated to reply to my query.
  
  Sincere regards
  
  gG
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    just a women in general empathizing
    
    No worries bout asking, sometimes one has to etc
    
    Cindy
Zigfiend
March 6
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Sobering
I enjoyed this throughly, while at the same time feeling and inexplainable guilt. "Weeping life from rash of saws" bring harrowing feelings to surface and really makes me ashamed I have not/can not do more to help. It also makes me realize just how disconnected humanity has become. I hope as many people read this as possible. Amazing work.
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- gnosisonG
  March 7
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  Cheers Zigfiend!
  Appreciate your generous comment and am gratified this piece connected with you.
  As for the guilt and shame felt by not actively participating in the alleviation of so much injustice, well, whatever one does, however little, helps I suppose, though I readily concede to feelings of futility myself.
  On the disconnected aspect, Bill raised an interesting point below. Thanx again.
  
  Warm regards
  
  gG
William McGarvey
March 6

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There is no victor of war
A masterpiece poem. What is happening in Gaza is truly a crime against humanity. I remember reading not so long ago that George Bush was in the Middle East with a peace proposal. That was the joke of the day at work. George Bush and peace are words that just don’t mix in the same sentence, sort of like military intelligence, the two words are like oil and water, they simple don’t mix.

A sobering read gG.

A side PS note maybe: The energy in the world seems to be rising. The polarities that pull us in the moment of decision (good and bad, positive and negative) seem to be increasing in strength. I find it significant that people are choosing the positive are becoming very spiritual (instead of religious) lately and people who choose the negative are acting more like animals these days. Where this will lead no one knows, but it is an interesting phenomena.

Great read gG

Bill

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- gnosisonG
  March 6
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  Cheers Bill!
  Great comment. Brings to mind a quote I recently read by Groucho Marx applied in the context of the military tribunals gearing up for Guantanamo´s "Nuremburg":
  
  Military justice is to justice what military music is to music.
  
  He also had one about military intelligence being a contradiction in terms didn´t he. Thanx for your kind words, kompis, and as for your PS, I think you are absolutely correct. Rianne Eisler calls this time a bifurcation point and the polarities are more and more evident as you say; and the poles are melting; and bipolar disorder seems to be the mental illness of choice nowadays; and recently rats were discovered to display bisexual tendencies...waitaminute. Strike that last.
  Anyway it seems events are coming to a head how ever one regards prophesies of 2012 ragnarok.
  As you and I both have kids then this becomes cause for much concern indeed. But you are always welcome to share my bunker if ever you are in the vicinity of Eidsvoll.
  
  Med Vennlig Hilsen
  
  gG
Lad
March 6

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It's no easy task for a poet to take on the "night-marey"s of the suffering, "herd"ed and lethally oppressed, gG, but you did it with what I feel is a true melancholy in this lament. And it ranges all through the Nazi camps, Baltic horrors, Chechen cruelties and the killing sands of central Africa - "wordless world", "sightless sound" and "subcutaneous hum" within these women's one, universally dark, cavitied pregnancies of nothing to be conceived but their pain and the poet's refrain on it.

This is searingly conceived, planned and executed poetic compassion, Simon. It brings Hobbes to mind: Homo homini lupus, Man is a wolf to man - and clearly a roving pack of alpha-wolves to helpless women.

I felt this poetic lamentation deeply. Very fine work.

Lad
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- gnosisonG
  March 6
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  Cheers Lad
  I wasn´t sure of the direction it would take when I started it and thereby the words adapted themselves to the theme more than a premeditated piece would. But the image of barbed wire at the outset pretty much set up for something grim and I had the disgusting Israeli incarceration of Gaza very much in the back of my mind.
  But of course Mary is a Jewish name and so I went for a less specific and more universal thrust, hopefully highlighting, subliminally at least, the paradox of Israeli oppression with the centuries of ghastly impositions inflicted upon Jews (mainly by christians - certainly not Levantines!).
  
  This scribble attempts more an evocation of a direct first-person feel, massaging the wordage to try and forge an atmosphere of immediate suffering. I think without the final pointers it might´ve been too loose.
  
  There´s a play of words in the title by the way: Jew eschewed and spat(at).
  Enjoyed your Hobbes quote Lad - I´d forgotten that one - thanx.
  
  High regards
  
  gG
Windhover
March 5

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ForgGiveness
Full of vitriol for pesecutors everywhere. I'm struggling trying to write a piece on forgiveness at the moment. Gratuitous forgiveness is an obscenity, I once heard a survivor of the camps say. Forgiveness is an act of self-preservation and (I know this is not how your title is meant to read) can be delivered to its intended recipient like a spit in his face. This has shades of that thinking for me. 'Night Mary's dreams 'is vintage gG. Well up to your usual unusually high standards. >W<
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- gnosisonG
  March 6
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  Cheers W
  Yeah, I would have to agree with you concerning gratuitous forgiveness as it seems to imply sweeping the past under the rug (doomed to repeat..etc). It´s too much like the catholic idea of forgiving sin, I think, too easy. I mean, the ideal of being able to start afresh with a clean slate and all is good, but this is in any case outweighed by the prodigious guilt trips, as a controlling device, layed out by a particularly pernicious brand of churchianity.
  Nonchalance in the face of immense wrongness really gets my goat at times - whether it concerns the abomination of the meat industry or subjugation of people via religiously fuelled militarism - the list goes on.
  Some things MUST never be forgiven until due recompense (at least in the form of admitting to a crime!) is proffered.
  I do at times become accutely embarrassed by my own winging, whining, self-absorbed melancholy writes when there seems to be so much more important shite to write about. But then moral crusaders are an utter drag (as I complacently remind myself).
  Thanx W. and good luck with your forgiveness piece.
  
  gG
dave ochs
March 5

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hey gG
a nice somber tribute to the forgotten victims of war. between the poem and picture i wonder if there was sub-conscience link (or conscience) between the cattlization of women, who are fenced and used as fodder like the animals. anyway its good to have an advocate like you to send poetic sharpnel of awareness into the fabric of our i don't give a shit as long as its not me, lives.
dave
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- gnosisonG
  March 5
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  Cheers Mr Ochs
  Cattlization eh? Yeah chattelization certainly, as in "chattel". Thanks Dave.
  gG