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Renaissance

The years have been kind to us
even if they haven't spared.
Surely no two people ever cared more.
And even if I didn't always adore you -
or you me - a blind man could see
our disaffection couldn't last.
We are tied by the bonds of a rich past
and the ability to put it behind us.
The evening of our lives will find us,
as evenings always have,
wrapped up warm in one another -
not two old things worn
and stuck together
because they didn't know what else to do -
but a seasoned love affair,
no longer obsessed with finding
something new
because it is confident
in Renaissance

And I still love you

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  • marcusmoore silver member
    April 2

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    Hey WH

    I found this to be very intriguing, at least to me. Just got caught up in it. Trying to dissect it, but that just made me more confused so I gave it some more reads and feel like I'm back where I was before I tried to OVERANALYZE. Like Lad said I enjoyed the part of taking a period of time that's so artistic and beautiful and apply that to the marriage conflict. At least that's the way I found the poem to be by reading it and others' comments on it. It might not be a marriage it could just be a relationship that you are talking about here, and it necessarily doesnt' HAVE TO BE OR ISNT DIRECTLY POINTED TOWARDS A FEMALE EITHER. It comes from a universal sex, somebody we haven't met yet. Makes it for a very more mysterious and universal read, at least for me it did. Which actually made me enjoy the poem more b/c now after saying that I re-read from the females perspective and it would work exactly the same as the male. Congrats on that. I found that to be one of the bigger accomplishments in this piece. I like the ending b/c it reinforces the rest of the poem alot. It basically comes out and says "WE ARE GOING TO BE TOGETHER B/C I LOVE YOU AND YOU LOVE ME". I obviously could go on and on and on about this poem. But I'll stop now b/f I embarass myself anymore than I already have. Congrats again and hope to hear from ya soon. I wrote something in a different vein about love on this site, it's all about a different time in your life, when you first think that you're in love in a relationship and everything's going great, at least for now. You may have already read it and just not liked it. But if you're interested it's called "Freshman Love". Always good conversing with ya, hope to hear from ya soon, it's always nice to hear from somebody you look up to who can give you some advice on "how to". Hopefully I'll be hearing from ya soon.

    TTYL
    MM

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  • Lad silver member
    April 1

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    Once again, morning's minion, you manage to combine an artistically historical image with something so human and humble: the living beauty of the Renaissance and the ongoing care of two people who have "the ability to put the past (known and accepted) behind us..."

    I may be out-of-it in this speed-driven and disposable world, but I'll never stop liking love poems that rise out of "seasoned" commitment, "no longer obsessed" with "new", but treasuring the old that's ever new to those whose mature eyes see loveliness in hard-built continuity.

    And there couldn't be a more fitting conclusion to the poem than those plainly and openly faithful five words.

    Later...
    Lad

  • mojojames gold member
    April 1
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    tender and honest...

    not all starry-eyed with forced illusions, but something in the form of further vows beyond the trials and problems of the first years of marriage, something of a "Renaissance." "Wrapped up warm in one another" is how I think most of us would like to spend our waning days. She's a lucky woman, Cheers, MJ

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    • Windhover gold member
      April 1
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      Named but not explained

      Thanks Richard, both for the review and the sentiment. I know that I certainly feel lucky and the poem celebrates that. As a younger man I feared that older couples had simply grown complacent and 'comfortable' with each other and I always feared that. But it turns out there's a 're-birthing' of relationships that can survive the storms (and the doldrums)which is something very hard to describe or explain. The poem just about names the phenomenon but describing it any way adequately would be quite beyond me I think. Which is probably why most young people would think older people are full of shit when they attempt to. Relationship breakdown is much easier to understand and more in line, alas, with their expectations. And everybody resents some fecker with good news crowing about it anyaway! I'll shut up now. Best >W<