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Culinary Delights

Come, let us renew our love
at the dining room table
let us stimulate our desires
arouse ourselves with exotic foods
meeting in a hot spicy tryst
a culinary menage a trois

your kiss like brandy
flushes my face
your tongue
like caviar
each time it is tasted
the savor of of it is
appreciated more

in the mean time, the strange
exotic flavor and texture
as it slides down your throat
is excitement enough

the heat of the loins
God what beef!
how well cooked
your mouth salivates
more brandy flows
down your throat
heat radiating throughout

the brandy on your lips?
the aftertaste of the caviar?
the heat of the loins?
My love, another napkin please!

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