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Sweet Nothings

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Nothing happened

Nothing was done

Nothing was said

Nothing had gone

Before


Nothing is sure


But somehow

Nothing was surer


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  • ravenontheleft
    May 10
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    interesting

    I like the dichotomy here. Its short length suits the content nicely. Thought provoking stuff.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    May 9
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    Some deep thinking within your words here >W<
    Intriguing picture..

    the repeated nothing, short lines...gave the piece even more umph..emotion..I spose

    Different for you I think this poem , but I dug it as much as I have the rest of yours

    Thanks for sharing

    Cindy

  • dave ochs silver member
    May 8

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    hey john

    hey john at first reading i thought this was about relatshonships because of the title but then i realized this was actually a poem about nothing and it took on a zen quality, like "empty mind" and i got it...i think
    dave

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