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No death

Well, nobody died.
I felt as though my world came crashing down around me and all I had ever believed in and hoped for and trusted in was dead.

The one person I had always admired and loved beyond measure and reason had betrayed me and not just betrayed me but betrayed me in a most vile manner.

My heart opened and bled and my soul poured out and the anguish poured out of me in a primal scream that reached the heavens and resounded in hell and the world shuddered.
But nobody died.
Not really.

Do you know anybody like this?

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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    May 17

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    Oh LD


    this explains your absence..I am so sorry to hear you have had to go through so much

    I hate to say that I do know someone like it...not anymore...to say the least..but they bleed me of everything....I wished I was simply dead....or that he was


    Part of my past...I dont visit, lets just say that.

    I'm here if u need someone to talk to

    Cin

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    • ladydwarf silver member
      May 18
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      yes love.........however will stay and work it out............thanks for the well wishes........huggers


  • Exoskeletal
    May 18
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    That motherfucker

    I hope you can move beyond it.

    I hope you have lots of friends to support you.

  • dave ochs silver member
    May 18

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    hey LD

    sorry for whatever happened. as to your question, i wasnt sure who you where talking about, the person that was betrayed, or the person who betrayed you, or a person you go for consolance who only says nobody died. hope your ok
    dave

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  • Nocturne
    May 19

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    I'm guessing this is a personal piece and not up for a critique. Known someone like this? Perhaps. The betrayals I've seen have been the quiet ones, those that consist of me simply disappearing from someone's life, as if I never existed. People I've known changing themselves into strangers, lying with just enough truth to really sink the barb deep.

    Cheers for the read,
    Nocturne

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  • leigh heart
    June 2
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    i know someone like this and been through this myself.

    hi, LD...i'm glad i snatched up a bit of time to visit your page...because i found this honest prose that may speak so much of pain but echoes what a lot of people go through in every corners of the world.

    i salute you for being able to share a piece that is as personal as this. thanks for sharing.

    kudos!
    leigh


  • Papyrus
    June 20
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    "you'll outlive the bastards!"

    LD,

    i love how you offset the over-dramaticised description of anguish and torment with the cool and casual, "but nobody died. not really." such a perfect tone for such an awful experience. sarcastic, yet moving on. you got some strength in you for sure.

    best,

    Pap


    • ladydwarf silver member
      June 22
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      hey thanks pap!

      Well the sequel to the story is we are still married. not sure how but it does seem to improving a bit. and i did have my part in all of it.........still my sp family helped support me through the drama..thanks for commenting. i brought the piece to the marriage counsellor......he was impressed....said if everyone could write like that he would have less work, lol! hugs!