I'm not so sure if you could call this a poem,
Because all I want to do is rant,
It doesn't need to make sense,
When the only thing we have to live for,
Is our philosophies and theories,
And I'm not so sure if this is random,
Because eventually every day I think about this,
And I don't know what to call this,
Because I don't think it should have a title,
I have come to the conclusion that I don't want to want to use,
Though it is always going to be there,
I am an addict,
Of drugs,
And my own personal addiction,
I am addicted to addiction,
If that made any sense at all,
I'm not so sure if it's totally correct,
In the way that I plan and see it,
These energy shots and pills that I take,
Suck to come off of,
And,
Sometimes be on,
They make me shake,
Like the leaves on a tree being blown by the wind,
That's what I feel like,
When,
I take these,
Things,
And I listen to music,
More the words,
Than the instrumental part of it all,
And I rock my head,
Pretending I'm there,
Feeling the words that are sung,
I get this deep rumble in my stomach,
Like a mosh pit is down there,
I want to jump all around,
I don't want to be an idiot,
There's this girl,
And,
We do things,
That we're not supposed to,
But it feels so damn good,
And,
It's against the rules,
A risk I feel I must take,
And,
I think she's just using me,
Because,
She has a boyfriend,
And,
I need to talk to her,
But the words get caught,
When I see them together,
I choke,
And,
It sucks,
By reading this I'm hoping that you could halp me uderstand what I need to do with all of this...
Reviews
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no, not a poem
it's more like a confession. Something you'd all just begin to ramble on about if confronted by a psychologist, and you just broke. But I , I like it. It is real. you go from thought to thought, but the stanza's have this powerful emotion behind them. Like the chilling scene in a movie where the psychopath is rambling on. ( lol not calling you a pyscho path!) but it really makes you slow down to read it, cause I can feel where you're coming from really. I get thoughts like these all the time. I just can't seem to write them down the right way. you seem to do that just fine. I really like this rize. It's real. perfect. A for ....awsometasticness!!! lol
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WOW!!!!!!
I really liked it rize I enjoyed reading this you spelled out everything it may not be a poem, but it is really good I felt every emotion that you put into this piece. Glad i read it I really liked that fact that you said "When the only thing we have to live for, Is our philosophies and theories," I liked that because we basically do, and it is kinda weird to that we do. I liked the line "I am addicted to addiction" that really got me it made sense to me and it's just like me kinda weird again when some people hear people saying I am addicted to addition they wonder or are confused, but i liked it in this piece. Very well done rize i enjoyed it cause it was awesome.
Sincerely your friend,
Chandra .c.
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interesting....but i don't know how to help you...i'm sorry....
SYmPtOm.QuEeR.
May 20
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