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How life was

I walked away..
looked down on shoes that ordered me to keep going.
Electric sparks of misguided thoughts
led me here,
to this place of miss you.

This place of curled up alone.
This dark room with one cup to drink from.
Wallpaper, hanging over me, unbordered,
stripped and threatening..
come down to smother me.

Haunted lights from cars flash by in uncurtained windows.
Eyes, too full of tears to shut them out.
Maybe I welcomed them, torturous, interrogating...

reminding me...
how life was...with you.


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  • oxymoron270 silver member
    June 13

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    Awesome

    Really great poem. Like the whole welcoming thing. Love the end. I love how you put in the "come down to smother me" line because the poem itself feels like it smothers you, which means good job with creating the tone and the images.

    Nice,
    Adie


    • callman
      June 18
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      Thank you Oxy..for your comments about my poetry. I call it poetry, but it's really just thoughts put into words. I'm glad you felt something from them enough to comment. It makes me feel like I got through to someone who understood how I was feeling. Many thanks.

  • Rooster45
    May 24

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    very good

    It put me right where you were.. I just lost mt true love 1 year ago may 12 2007.Thanks for the memory


    • callman
      June 18
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      Thank you rooster..I'm so sorry for your loss ...I hope time is a healer. Be safe and hugs. x

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