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Fishnets

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Fishnets so flagrantly fail to protect from the cold.

Inspiring instead the intrigue of a story untold

Send seeping and seething a signal so dark stocking-holed

Hold forth hopes unwholesome hard hid by their hundredfold holes

Naughtily networking nett worth of stocking not knit

Enticingly easily spicily clingingly fit

Tights titillating worn torn turning tantalized eyes

Sheer sexy sensuous, scandalous lace-latticed thighs

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Not my usual fare. Written for an acrostic competition

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  • mojojames gold member
    May 29
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    And I was all set for a trolling expedition out in one of your picturesque bays. The disappointment hardly surfaced as I was caught in the mesh of the "story untold." The rhymes are not obvious or intrusive.

    I especially like the alliteration in the last four lines racing to the climax. You're a very very bad boy and you know it. Cheers, MJ


  • Cactus
    May 28

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    lovely

    hope u won that competition for what u wrote it.lovely work perfect rhyming and beautiful form.lovely description and picturisation.i loved the beginning and the phrase "inspiring insted the intrigue" is nice.

    . Rewarded 4

  • dave ochs silver member
    May 27

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    hey john

    i thought this was intriging. sure fishnets are sexy but it was the sentence structure, i'm not english professor (ha) but it seems like the subject and predicate got reversed and gave it special something.
    dave

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  • himanshumodi
    May 27
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    Rhyming acrostic!!! Thats difficult to pull off!! Cheers!

    BTW... did u win??


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
    May 27

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    Well gee's for not your usual fare..I think your shining....Naturally I would eat up a read like this and I did

    but well..being a girl first of all..LOVE FISHNETS , so that one me over right from the start

    I can't stand, one thing and I get so afraid when I see acrostic..it's goingt o happen...It Doesn't Flow.

    but have no fear...as this rolled of the tongue one word to the next..one line to the next

    A brilliant alive with naughty images acrostic here >W<

    Would like to see more of em from you


    Cindy

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    • Windhover silver member
      May 27
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      Up your street.

      Cin, I almost dedicated this to you so sure was I that it would be right up your (rather saucy little) street! Fishnets aren't every girl's cup of tea you know but I knew you'd like them. Which brought me to thinking had you ever read 'Torn Stockings' (another poem of mine on the theme you may not have read - it's at http://sharepoetry.com/poem/23650 )And yes, I know what you mean about acrostics, they annoy the hell out of me. But as a writing excercise this DID make me work at continuity and flow, so maybe they serve some purpose. Anyway, thanks for commenting so generously as always and glad you liked it. >W<


      • MaMa-2-be-Cindy silver member
        May 27
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        Hehehe

        I think I do remember it but would love to stop in on it again , thanks>W<

        they definetly teach you a lot about meter and flow, acrostics



        Cin

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