Take a deep breath and soar
Way up high over beautiful shore
Where wishes are no longer dreams
And everything lovely gorgeously gleams
Soar to a place where imagination is reality
Soar to a place of complete abnormality
Life is precious but dreams more essential
For without dreams life has no potential
So soar to a place where dreams come true
Soar to the place where you are the truest you
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nice thoughts
Hi there. Nice thoughts throughout this piece. Heartwarming. However I find the rhymes are the obvious standout, sacrificing a more unique way of expressing the emotions you wish to share. May I suggest using rhymes as a tool to bring some form to the piece but attempting to seek images that will move the piece into more poetic territory. Sorry, I think I rambled there.. Rewarded 8
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Amazing =D
I like how encouraging and uplifting this poem is. I like the last to lines best; people need to be themselves. some of the rhymes seem to stick out a little, like they should not be there. but i could be wrong. overall i loved the poem. -
Really beautiful, very warm and has an inspirational tone to it. Rhymes unforced, eloquent.
July 10
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