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Lost in the fog

Lost in the fog
I tripped over a log
i heard a lark
He was in a tree bark
I realize that i am in a bog

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  • onyx2010
    March 11, 2009

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    This poem was short and sweet. You simplicity did not take away from the imagry and it flowed nicely. I enjoyed reading this and look foward to more.


  • X-haydenx-xnochio-X
    June 2, 2008
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    lol

    I love it! great ryhmes and visuals!!! areba!!!