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Dedicated to Edward Lear and Lewis Carrol

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Sing a song of silliness,
Entertain amusing ambuscades.
Happily hurumphing over harried hilliness,
Go gaily galumphing in the glades.

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Just something I came up with at 4:00 in the morning when I couldn't sleep. I wanted to do something completely silly, like a old Monty Python sketch.
I was reading the verses of Lewis Carrol and Edward Lear, and this short poem is dedicated to them. Hope you enjoy.

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  • mojojames gold member
    July 10
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    This fits in well with the influences you mentioned. But it's tantalyzingly short. I picture a character like Tweedledum/dee galumphing through the woods and forests singing the song. Next time you're up at 4AM maybe you could try to extend it into stanzas. This by itself has a good lilt and rhythm to it. Cheers, MJ

  • blazingleo
    July 6

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    ones always caught up in the rat race of life and there is so much of serious stuff in life .Being silly actually when u are an intellectual is a wonderful way to relax and forget all the tensions of life.


    • ladyjanew gold member
      August 8
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      Thank you! Sorry it took so long to reply to your comment. I'm not on the net that much.