you are more
than sustenance
you are more
than just dessert
you are ethereal
intangible
elusive
you are the edge
on a perfect Sauvignon
the difference
between a cigar
and a Havana
between bread
and manna
you are the buzz
around a good dinner table
and what is between us
is the numbing
of uncut coke on gums
the difference
between the sum
and the parts
it’s greater than
You are so much more
than food
you are the thought of it
to a man starving
you are the curl
of hot chicken breast
at carving
you are the power
of a glimpse of stocking
you are soupsson
definite but delicate taste
of more
you are frisson
a tingle
running up and down
my spine
the holy grail
not just the altar wine
and I want to make you
mine
.
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I love the picture....yum, food.
Anywho, this is great. You really bring out the meaning to being a writer. It brings me back to why I started doing it in the first place, what I work for.
Nicely done,
Ashley
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Exra special thanks
Skip, this is a wonderful compliment and I really thank you for it. This was one of those poems that I just knew would be one of my own favourites as soon as I started writing it, so your comment is extra appreciated. >W<
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This poetry, more than it's own quality, is a good example how good you can be with your imagery (Not that I ever doubted it)
Some fab images... My fav one was
the difference
between the sum
and the parts
it’s greater than
Guess it appealed to the quantitative side of me
Thematically, I guess it was not too complicated to write. I do wish you had done more than just a series of complements to your element, your God, your Words. Rewarded 8
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Hey H. Thanks for the kind words. I would have thought those lines were more play on words and concept than imagery. Forgive me for also suggesting that your closing comments border on being patronizing and slightly artistically intrusive. But I thank you anyway. >W<
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Ahh yes... Pardon me for that! More than patronizing... it undermines that I did enjoy the poem a lot!
Cheers
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Just brilliant , I am glad I stopped in on it >W< , such wonderful imagery in your descriptions..seeing as I am a wine lover I am drawn to the perfect sauvignon..loved those lines
A joy to read this, poetically said so well
Cin
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Sauvignons Rule!
Hey Cinful One! Some great Sauvignons down your neck of the woods. Tried 'Cloudy Bay' or 'Oyster Bay' ? They're probably dead cheap down there. Glad you like my poem and thanks for stopping by. >W<
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pretty tasty
you demonstrate a sharp palate here for the finer things in life and a special appreciation for the word. if i dig for a critigue so as not to be accussed of being too soft i thought the end lacked punched.
dave. Rewarded 4
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I'll get you back!
Hey Professor, who ever accused YOU of anything? They wouldn't dare. I'm quite disappointed you thought it lacked 'punch', I was very pleased with this one, but I'd rather you said so, of course. I'll just have to rip the shit out of your next one by way of revenge! Ha Ha! Thanks as always for the comment, you know I don't feel it's been looked unless you look at it. My Best to You as ever. >W< -
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hey john
sorry really if you disagree with my comment, (and rip me if you must) i only said the last line lacked punched, because each image (which were really good) is a set up, so thinking about it i thought something like
i want to set the world on fire/
with every line.
or something is more appropo, but i've gotton lots of them wrong before. i think the writer has to use his own disgression, with criticism, personally i think most are off base.
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Smiles lost in print
Hey Dave. This feels like another of those occasions where the smiles get lost in the print and you take me a little more seriously than I intended. I have a thick enough skin and there was nothing at all wrong with your comment. I reckon it's pretty daring for a disciple to want to 'own' the thing he's praying to but hey, it works for you or it doesn't. And thanks for the 'set the world on fire' remark, I was really pleased with that. As I said, I had a good feeling about this poem and it's been 'good for me' somehow. Take it easy, my friend and thanks. Later. >W<
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Great job!
There are so many good images here: the holy grail, wine, meat to a man starving, coke, cigars; you have wonderful images too boot! And your poem is so true! What writer wouldn't rather have inspiration than food to eat or wine to enjoy? It is so bloody true, and that makes this poem so awesome!
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Glad you 'got' it.
Hey Lady J. Sometimes you write something and it's just exactly what you wanted it to be and this was one of those times for me. So it's really great to have somebody really 'get' it. Thank You so much. >W<
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