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Alliteration Excercise

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My mind is a corroded cacophony -
a silly symphony of anxious ennui,
poundingly played by a fruity Sadducee
who put LSD in his caffine-free green tea,
and finished with a final finale
performing a guitar solo ala Tin Pan Alley.

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Just having fun with words.

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Comments


  • lovesLennon
    September 13

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    omgod! great!

    your just having fun with words and i love it. reminds me of john lennon..but thats probably just me. i really like it


  • himanshumodi
    July 7

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    Err... There can't be much improvement when you are having fun with words! It's purest form of writing! If you had fun while writing it... you really, really dont have to seek anything else.