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Spirit

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she doesn’t pull her punches
no pussies in Spirit’s bed
except hers
unless invited

tread boldly
or don’t go there , captain

quirky as Kate Bush,
tough as Mr T,
sexy as wet panties
on the bedroom floor
nobody has more balls than Spirit
and what she has
he never got

cool
beyond hot

real

spirit


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  • himanshumodi
    July 10

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    Who is spirit??

    Well... if this was a tribute to her sexiness, and she is a real person... it read good.

    But...
    If this was for the "spirit" as in a soul, it could be in a very strange way, it is, well strange. I couldn't attribute all the qualities you have written to a literal spirit.

    But considering you have a picture here, I guess it is the former.

    Cheers!

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  • marcusmoore silver member
    July 10

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    hey WH

    Very beautiful picture to start off with. And wow I think I'd try to sneak on in her bed or at least get permission. But Spirit sounds like a crazy little firecracker that ya usually only read about or see in movies unless ya live in a town like LA or are just lucky enough to find one randomly, either way the poem explodes with great vivid explanations and descriptions of this person that I feel like I know a couple of people close to this type of character. But then again there's always more than you can fit on here, which is another thing I liked alot, you kept it concise and to the point, no room wasted, none needed. Very well written and a very appealing poem.

    TTYL
    MM

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