Why do you lie and say you love me?
You say you love me when your headed out the door
When I know your going to his house
I cant trust you anymore
I gave you chance after chance
You play the blame game and turn it around
You say I don't love you
Just because I don't scream and shout
Why the fuck cant you believe me your all I think about
You say you want me to hold you then you say you need space
Make up your fucking mind up if you want me to stay
You say I don't care but your the one around him
You say we won't last but who knows the truth
I'd give my life for another second with you
Yet your still at his house right as we speak
I toss and I turn without an ounce of sleep
Maybe and ounce of something else might be a treat
And maybe what looks like a mistake is really my escape
I'm going to spread my wings and fly
Into a deep and troubled sleep
Wake me up when this world says goodbye to its sorrow
Did anyone out there relate to this in any way?
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yea
I'd say I related to this poem with the sense of feelings that girls are impossible to please until they get older and know what they really want. That's why i think that most high school and some college dating is taken too seriously. People are starting to think about who they want to be with before they think about what they even want to do. I can say this b/c I was/am one of those people LoL. Hopelessly romantic trying to find the right girl for me NOW! but mostly its just the attention and acceptance that we want/need at this point in our lives. But the feelings of want and loss I can definately connect with in this poem. the cheating thing never happened with me, but she was hot and cold, back and forth, just like you say in the poem, make up your mind. I have written something similiar to this recently, check them out, one is "Bubble Chump"and the other is "Exfoliating an Ex" they are both about loss in love or relationships that fuck up. Nice talking to ya, good poem overall, I liked the format you used b/c most people either ignorantly or just b/c of lack of courage wouldnt make they're meter that far apart with their rhymes. Hope to hear from ya soon and keep writing, peace.
TTYL
MM
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awsome man
man i kinda relate to that not like she was at another mans house but she ignored me all the same -
Aw, poor guy. If you have dated someone like this, she sounds like a bitch. =P
Anywho, this is well written. I personally can't relate b/c I'm a dork and I've had an actually boyfriend before. Go figure. But as for your poem, it makes me know how you feel. You allow the reader to see into your eyes and understand what you're going through. I can tell you took the time to write this one out.
Great job,
Ashley
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Thats really ace. Two things tho, one is the two tenses in one line "You say you love me when your headed out the door", should it be "you said" or alternativly "when you head"/"heading".
Also, you have your yours confused, most of them should be you're rather than your.
Other than that it is really good, very will written and I know what you mean. Your emotion is really well conveyed.
marcusmoore
July 13
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