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Chocolate Icecream


Chocolate ice cream
Like cool crisp mud that’s sweet to taste

Tantalizing those senses within my tongue
A provoking delight to devour at full sight

My lips pucker, within close contact,
As I open wide for this frozen pleasure

My taste buds quiver in orgasmic anticipation

Shear, convulsive shock waves pulsate in my mouth
As it enters
The dramatic phase begins
As it makes a melting descent
Down my throat
Refreshing my insides
Slowly it moves through my veins
Towards my toes
Eluded, my mind breaks from reality
Toward an ethereal world of shear delight
And innocent temptation

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