Gone

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  skipeople
  August 5
  
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  This is chill. I like the background ^.^
  
  The beginning is strong and your ryhming doesn't come off as anything forced, but rather helps the flow move along. You're missing and "ed" on destroyed. The only thing that really stuck out, in a bad sense, was when you used the word eventually. It's a longer word, especially compared to the rest of the poem. That isn't that off though, so no worries.
  
  I think that people will be able to agree with you on this, that no matter what happens to make us happy, that feeling is always broken by another event. No matter want we wish for and hope for, it hardly comes true b/c shit happens. =}
  
  Nicely done,
  Ashley

  
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    inspired-8
    August 5
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    thanks for reading Ashley will work on the grammar (my achille's heal lol)
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  purple esprit
  August 8
  
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  A very deep and thought stirring poem my friend, it cannot be read and forgotten, there is something with your words that keeps it lingering on and there is a whole story woven inbetween your lines. Thank you! Ulla xx
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  purple esprit
  September 13
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  A powerful poem Vic, full of despair and the ache of loss. Then I think what leads to die will also give room for the new light to dawn. We can believe that nothing is forever. If we relate to the happy times it is of course tragic to see them end, but darkness and sorrow also are not forever, they die and give birth to new happiness.
  Your poem made me really think, thank you. Take care, as I care. Ursula