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Lost in My Confuzed Emotions

Hurt, Deciet, Lies, & Pain,

Hopelessness, Neglect

All just interfears...

Ive opened my heart and let you in

You told me to share my deepest sorrow and that you would understand....

I did all you said I opened up

and you could not take the fire...

I tried and pleaded to keep it in

But all i really wanted was someone to hold me up higher

I needed a friend that would understand

And to fill this burning desire

Can You Relate?

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  • skipeople
    August 16
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    For someone so young, you have talent trying it's hardest to poke through. You have ryhming going on with some of the lines, but they don't come out as forced in any way. You did a good job, keeping-up with the whole flames idea. And you have a strong beginning, so. . .

    good job,
    Ashley