To Watch From Afar

I watch from afar. There's light emanating from her face A smile hidden behind those cheeks One of those secret smiles So strong they aren't even noticed By the keeper of expression So much so that the lips hardly move She is strong in the emotional sense Determined more than the average It shows in her misplaced smile And in the manner she carries herself Taking each stride with pride, I think So it seems to me from afar I watch this complicated person each day I observe and take note of each hidden emotion I examine each movement closely It is myself I watch, however For there's some importance in that I believe I'm worth knowing as much as another I am not the me I once thought I knew. Or perhaps I'm simply more observant of myself. Therefore I watch myself from afar To know myself inside out. After all, knowing others is important But knowing others is vain if I cannot know myself.

What do you think of this? Be completely honest.

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  secret13
  August 22
  
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  I think it's a very sweet poem.  I like the beginning especially. The only part I thought was a little awkward

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  Goin 2 Ashes
  August 25
  
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  very good

  There's much to like in this free-verse poem good words and rhythm. Just on little nit, I ould prefer seeing more imagery. Show don't tell. Like perhaps you could work in somwhere:what I see is the shadow of a stranger, when I look inside the the stranger is me, and perhaps a few more images here and there Your poem is good, I think
  the use of images or metaphors or similes would makke it come more alive. It is your poem. Please use my suggestion or not.
  
  Rich

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• blazingleo
  August 27
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  good

  Quite an introspective poem.I like it .