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A Letter To My Team

Girls,
Were at the commencement of a season new-
A year from the time we were together last.
In the year we all changed and I know we all grew.
These beginnings grant us relief from the past.

I know we have had challenges difficult to face
That have caused us to blame, cry and despise.
All our aches, hopes, and efforts- being called a disgrace.
What we have been through, few can truly realize.

Now pressure is mounted more than ever before
To rise up and above the cards we've been dealt.
Everyone's waiting for things better and more.
None the less it's the way at one time we've all felt.

I speak for all when I say we can't stand for much less.
"To the play-offs we go"- it's a mindset, not a dream.
I want to win so badly I can taste the success.
I know us all girls, and we're tougher than we seem.

Let the past be the past, but keep it inside.
Use that fire to heal the drive we may lack.
The season is new, but the floodgates are wide.
If you give it your all, I'll always have your back.

Love,
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  • SYmPtOm.QuEeR.
    August 27

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    I actually really liked it, it's a bit awkward at some points but i like the feeling to it.i think it's grand

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