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You and Me

If there is anything in the world as you and me,
It is but the fragmentation of the human mind.
Break open the mind in you,,
Then see the divinity that flow,
All around you begins to glow.

You would want to renounce it slow
Without any hardships and blow.
There is something special within you,
You ought to just look through,
To feel it like the deep divine dew.

The world that seemed a Garden of hue,
With different colors of green orange and blue,
Would turn into an celestial color of One
That can be estranged by none.

The Lord created you or you created the Lord,
Its all about the same.
For you are the Lord and the Lord is you.
Just break open the mind in you,
And you would see that the Lord is you and you are the Lord.

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Comments

  • chloesunshine
    September 23

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    didnt do it for me.

    no offense but it sounded like you picked words from a thesaurus r the bible. the first lines were eye catching though

    • rhythmdivine
      September 23
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      No offense from my end either..neither have I read a thesaurus nor a bible..Nevertheless the words that I write are a sheer outpour of emotion and energy in rhythm which is in my very tag name rhythmdivine. It is natural for a reader to get blinded with his own prejudice..Thanks for your analysis anyway..You have pointed a new dimension of thought..