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Goodbye

No I’m not fine
You know that fake smile you see?
It’s been painted on
It’s not truly me

I try my best
To please you all
But this pain is too much
With every step I fall

I wish you could help me
But this is my burden to bear
I know this is hurting you
But these weren’t made to share

A shattered emotion
No other can compare
Life’s a bleak scenario
A tragedy unaware

I’m bruised and I’m broken
A meaningless trace
I’m rotting on the inside
I can’t find my place

I tremble in shivers
And think to myself
Am I a forgotten book
Stuck on my shelf?

A timeless classic
Where the dust collects
With memories so fearful
It hurts to recollect

I’m walking on eggshells
Swimming in broken glass
Every lie I tell
Are just words that will pass

I’m looking in a mirror
At a face full of shame
I’ve spun my own web
I’m losing my own game

I’m sorry to those I’ve hurt
Sorry to those who don’t know
But all the wrong I’ve done
Is just too painful to show

This poem has no meaning
I’m not trying to compete
But if I don’t write this
I’ll feel incomplete


My mind is stuck
On a nasty image
It’s ruined my feelings
And I’ve lost the privilege

The privilege to life
The allowance to feel
I’ve taken it and abused it
But now I’ve set the deal

My soul I’ll hand over
In exchange, I’ll forget
I’m giving my life up
In hell I’ll be set

I’m not sorry for leaving
But I’m sorry I was sly
You deserve better now
I love you, goodbye.

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Comments


  • lovesLennon
    September 16
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    me and my brother loved it! i liked the seventh stanza alot. you have good imagery. good job!

  • beautiful is not the word

    "I’m bruised and I’m broken
    A meaningless trace
    I’m rotting on the inside
    I can’t find my place" i love this piece.. i mean i like the whole poem but this brought me back to reading it again.. Wonderful work.. do keep writing...

    traveller