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eternity

you make me feel so warm
you take my fears away
i will love you forever day after day.
your soft lips your touch
send shivers down my spine
im so glad you are mine.
so let us take each other's hands
and step into the eternity of light
i promise i will love you with all my might.
take the red rose for our love
the blue rose for our passion
white rose for our souls.
we will never be apart.
we will always be in each others hearts.

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